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Vball Chickie1624 Member
since 2000-05-14
Posts 116New York |
To the one I love: Always there, Through thick and thin. Always there, Whether I lose or win. Never gave up on me, Even when I left you. Never gave up on me, After all you went through. Stood by my side, Right until the end. Stood by my side, While you let my heart mend. You were still there, After I broke your heart. You were still there, After our relationship fell apart. You gave me time, To think things through. You gave me time, To realize I still loved you. You gave me another chance, To prove my love. You gave me another chance, With my angel from up above. We're together now, And still going stong. All because you make me feel, Like I'm right where I belong. This is my chance to say thanks, For opening my eyes and letting me see. This is my chance to tell you I love you, And that you mean everything to me. Hey guys...tell me what you think..be HONEST please...and if you have any suggests for the title, I'd love to hear them. I'd explain the backgroud to you, but I think it's pretty self explanatory! "Dream what you want to dream; go where you want to go; be what you want to be, because you have only one life and one chance to do all the things you want to do." "The role of a writer is not to say what we can all say, but what we are unable to say." - Anais Nin "Follow your own heart, not others." |
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amazon_lover Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 491Dublin,Ireland |
A nice one to a person who has stood by your side at all time... I tried hard for a title..I guess soulmate would be a good one for this sensible person.. Sincerely A_L |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
Great Read! i liked it very much. you have received the chance and patience that most never receive. i'm glad you've shared this. it lets us know there are still nice people out the. i'm glad you've gotten the chance to meet and keep one. as for a title, i thought of Shania Twain the whole time. "still the one" seems to fit. again, great read. We all got somethin' we need to atone for. |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
well i voted for this one and it was a great read thanks for posting it as for a title i like both the ones already came up with so you choose. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
Wow, this reply box has so many new neat little buttons!!! I could sit here all day click to my heart's content!... Title...umm, i cannot really ever think of titles for my own twisted works, but i will give it a shot... Soulmate is good, but its overused, you need a unique title for a unique work... Umm, well, i get back to the title thing latter. As for poetry, the unfailing focal for lifes stress and joys, i think to trully understand the poem, you must understand the poet. Otherwise the words are just that, words. Each one of us has diffent feelings attached to certain words, the great idiosyncracies of humanity... Ah, i'm babling again!!! Great poem, but i think if you want a good title, you must come up with it yourself... |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
It's nice to know sometimes that people appreciate what you've done for them. And you have basically written a poem that your guy should be very proud of. I wish my ex-girl would feel the same way. Great poem vball chickie. As to helping you with the title, there's a lot of possibilities. Just go thru one of the lines in the poem and use it as the title. you could use "Always There", "My Angel"..... Looking forward to reading more of your poems |
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Vball Chickie1624 Member
since 2000-05-14
Posts 116New York |
Thanks for the replies guys...actually I haven't shown this to my boyfriend yet. I just wrote it the other night...I will though, hopefully....I don't show my poetry to anybody really...except you guys..it's hard...there's a lot of emotions in them, but I know you guys know how I feel...ANYWAY thanks a lot = ) "Dream what you want to dream; go where you want to go; be what you want to be, because you have only one life and one chance to do all the things you want to do." "The role of a writer is not to say what we can all say, but what we are unable to say." - Anais Nin "Follow your own heart, not others." |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
i really think that this poem is beautiful.. you should give it to your boyfriend..i think that he would really like it..it is soo sweet.. ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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