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ValerieB726
Junior Member
since 2000-06-21
Posts 14
Louisville,OH, USA

0 posted 2000-06-21 07:47 PM


Tears of sadness
fall from my eyes
when I think of how
you treated me.
I wasn't the beauty queen
you had before.
And you told me in actions
the way you felt
every time I tried to hold you.
You had to act cool
in front of your friends
But that is what caused this to end.
You ruined the love we had.
But when I think of the love I still have
Tears of sadness
fall from my eyes.



© Copyright 2000 Valerie - All Rights Reserved
amazon_lover
Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 491
Dublin,Ireland
1 posted 2000-06-21 08:40 PM


Hi Valerie
Never trust a person who puts a show in front of others unless the circumstance was so that he couldn't reveal himself as he is....May be sometimes we don't really know what we do...

Sincerely
A_L

Erin
Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
2 posted 2000-06-22 01:14 AM


man is this the truth. girl all guys are like that (at least most of them). they think that they have to show off for there friends but who needs guys like that? i really liked it though.

~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~

Erin
Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
3 posted 2000-06-22 01:15 AM


and no guy is worth you time if he is gonna treat you like that. font>< !signature-->

~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~


[This message has been edited by ERIN (edited 06-22-2000).]

Jeremiah Johnson
Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
4 posted 2000-06-22 02:18 AM


yes no man is worth that pain. and i hate the ones who do that to girls like they don't care. it hurts don't you wish it was like the old days when guys were romantics.
  P.S great piece of your work here.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665
Twilight Zone
5 posted 2000-06-22 10:21 AM


Val,

if your man tries to show adifferent him in front of others, i don't think he's the trustworthy type.  What if he's actually trying to show you the type of guy that you'd fall for.  i know its hard to let go of someone you really feel you love so much.  me, i'm still holding on eventhough it's been a month and i don't wanna let go.  And i'll never let go cause i love this girl so much.  have you even tried sitting down with him and talk and not argue.  tell him what you like and what you don't like.  if he doesn't want to sit down, then he;s not worth it then.  i feel so sorry for you. i hope things get better. good luck  

StarPryncess17
Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932
Colorado
6 posted 2000-06-22 01:22 PM


This is a beautiuful but sad poem! I'm sorry that you are feeling this pain! It's not very pleasurable. I do not know much about this relationship other than what you have stated within these lines...But I do know that everything heals and changes with time--even your heart. Keep your head up and smile! Best of Luck in healing! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~
                      


~*~Love is the product of our dicontentment with ourselves~*~
~*~SMILE! It makes your butt shine!~*~

Nikkisweet
Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 183
Tx, Dallas
7 posted 2000-06-23 10:45 PM


This poem was also very good. I don't know what the problem with boys is sometimes. Most of them just don't care. It sounds like you've been hurt.  This poem was also very good.  Check out my poem "This one tear".  Nicley done, and I can't wait to read some of your other work.
Isabel Galaxia
Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733

8 posted 2000-06-23 11:41 PM


Hey, you shouldn't cry over this guy.  You might have loved him, and the relationship might have been good for a while, but I doubt he deserved you.  Good luck to you, I hope you find someone worth your time and effort.
Bel

Christopher J
Member
since 2000-06-21
Posts 94

9 posted 2000-06-24 12:49 PM


This poem is very, very good...it made me think about how i act around people i love...
~Night_Mist~
Junior Member
since 2000-06-24
Posts 31
Calgary, AB Canada
10 posted 2000-06-24 04:20 PM


Hey Val:
    That's a beautiful poem. I often feel the same way about guys and yeah, don't let him hurt you too much girl! Good luck and great poem!
                                    ~Night_Mist~



[This message has been edited by ~Night_Mist~ (edited 06-24-2000).]

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural
11 posted 2007-11-18 01:56 PM


Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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