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Master
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since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867
Boston, MA

0 posted 2000-06-21 01:00 PM


Oh, spare me, Love! Don’t burst inside my chest!
Allow me to distribute what you gave me!
Filled to the brim and stripped of all my rest,
I’m blessed to know that you enslaved me.
Simplicity, how great you’ve grown to be!
Neither, too plain nor too complex in essence.
How come you chose to show yourself to me,
When millions are craving for your presence?
How come the holiest of churches lack your will?
And purest wine cannot bring out your flavor?
How come the feeling that you make me feel,
Was absent, on Last Supper, from the table?
If so you’re willing, do bring forth the cup,
And I shall drink until the final drop!



Check out my poetry here:


http://cafepoetry.com/stage1/andrey_kneller.htm#My%20Hamlet


© Copyright 2000 Andrey Kneller - All Rights Reserved
Jeremiah Johnson
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
1 posted 2000-06-21 01:56 PM


this is different from some of your other work but its still a great piece i really like the last line it makes me feel like giving in.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


Novacaine For The Soul
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since 2000-05-26
Posts 122
New Orleans
2 posted 2000-06-21 02:29 PM


dear master,
     this is lovely (as is all your work)... the contrast of religion and romantic love was well layed out and carefully crafted... very good job... this must be one special person to draw such passionate love from the depths of your poetic heart...

sincerely,
a sad tomato

you're such a beautiful freak... i wish there were more just like you...

Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley
3 posted 2000-06-21 05:18 PM


Thought you'd hide in here heh!? I found this gem! And am voting as we speak!  
Angel
Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551
Pennsylvania
4 posted 2000-06-21 09:30 PM


This would make an awesome addition to the book! It really must be about someone special  .

~Susie


"If we could read the secret history of our enemies, we should find in each man's life sorrow and suffering enough to disarm all hostility."
~Henry W

LoveBug
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5 posted 2000-06-21 10:45 PM


Between you and Novicane, we're going to have lots of beautiful sonnets in our book!

"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
"The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea

Master
Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867
Boston, MA
6 posted 2000-06-22 12:14 PM


Thank you everyone!

Check out my poetry here:


http://cafepoetry.com/stage1/andrey_kneller.htm#My%20Hamlet


Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
7 posted 2000-06-27 07:14 AM


This is beautiful Master ... wonderfully
expressed and thought-provoking!  
Really well done!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

Artic Wind
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since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural
8 posted 2007-11-18 03:32 PM


Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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