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Novacaine For The Soul
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0 posted 2000-06-20 08:59 PM


A Sonnet of Life & Death
(Upon A Visit To My Dying Grandfather)

As men of frail form and noble mind
Stand silently before the doors of death
And softly knock, there fearing now to find
Some emptiness beyond the final breath,
It solace gives to meditate on life
And death embrace no longer as a curse,
But freedom giv'n from bonds of mortal strife
So he that once came last might now come first.
It nothing prospers men who choose to live
A life of preparation for the end
But rich in spirit is the man who gives
The riches of his heart to other men.
     Man searches endlessly for love's dim light
     And then, only in death, discovers life.


© Copyright 2000 The Fragile - All Rights Reserved
Alwye
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In the space between moments
1 posted 2000-06-21 12:46 PM


"Man searches endlessly for love's dim light
And then, only in death, discovers life." A very powerful way to end an incredible piece of work.  It's great have your presence around here again.  You have glorious talent, you do.  


*Krista Knutson*

"Cherish your vision; Cherish your ideals; Cherish the music that stirs in your heart, the beauty that forms in your mind, the loveliness that drapes your purest thoughts. If you remain true to them, your world will at last be built." ~James Allen~


"We've made houses for hatred...it's time we made a place where people's souls may be seen and made safe"...~Jewel~

Jeremiah Johnson
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2 posted 2000-06-21 01:26 AM


i love your work here. but where the idea came from is sad (sorry). great poem here keep up the good work .

I'm the lord, I'm the havoc, I'm the soul



Master
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3 posted 2000-06-21 11:52 AM


I'm sorry to hear about your grandfather... This poem is truly touching...

"but rich in spirit is the man who gives
the riches of his heart to other men." -- stunning!


Master

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4 posted 2000-06-21 12:16 PM


awesome piece
Shakespeare would be proud of you
14 lines 10 syl each, perfect

I love reading sonnets by W.S. adn now i could say I love reading yours too.  Maybe we could share sonnets one of these days.  I love writing them too, just don't want to post them here for some reason.

thanks for sharing your sonnets
looking forward to reading more

Ethan Halo
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5 posted 2000-06-21 03:31 PM


Extremely well penned! i am in awe of your talent. writing a sonnet was never really my forte, but you must definitely have a talent for it. and not only the scheme and rhythm, but the words make sense and they are very stirring. i'd pick out my fav lines, but i'd have to recopy the whole thing. great job.

We all got somethin' we need to atone for.

Poet deVine
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6 posted 2000-06-21 03:45 PM


Methinks this doth needs to be in the book sir!!  
ValerieB726
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7 posted 2000-06-21 07:29 PM


Very well written. You have a lot of talent and it shows in this one work. Keep writing.
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8 posted 2000-06-21 10:32 PM


Wow... this is so powerful! This really touched me. You are a wonderful poet.

"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
"The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea

angel6917
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9 posted 2000-06-23 05:57 PM


A very good and touching poem... Like I said before, i look forward to more of your work...  
Love ya lots,
Kristi Lynn

Cerenity
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10 posted 2000-06-23 10:49 PM


This is so perfect I so enjoyed it, thank you so much for sharing.

Cerenity

anonymousfemale
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11 posted 2000-06-23 11:16 PM


N.F.T.S: this is a fantastic piece of writing. Sonnets are one of my fav pieces of poetry to read and you have done it well. I am sorry to hear about your Grandfather though.

Every single line hit me and it is truely great to have you back around here.

~AF~

"Poetry is the language in which man explores his own amazement."
Christopher Fry


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12 posted 2007-11-18 01:55 PM


Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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