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XTC_AngeL
Junior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 17
Australia

0 posted 2000-06-17 09:08 AM


To you guys who read my poem "Our friendship" dedicated to my best friend Steve, well he knows that I like him and he's broken up with his gf, BUT at my school's formal he was with 2 yr 12 (we're yr 11) chicks in front of me, so this is to him again..

As my tears run down,
I watch them fall below,
From my heart to my eyes,
and finally on my pillow.

You broke your promise to me,
And you too have messed me round,
Now in my heart,
An aching I have found.

You were the only male,
I felt I could trust,
But now you too have hurt me,
A feeling from my past.

And as I write this poem,
Tears blur my sight,
Love, pain and memories,
Of you I thought were right.

What you've done to me,
Has ripped me apart,
I hope one day you realise,
That YOU broke my heart.


¤XTC AngeL¤

© Copyright 2000 Nat - All Rights Reserved
Angel
Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551
Pennsylvania
1 posted 2000-06-17 11:57 AM


Getting your heart broken is the worst feeling in the world...especially by your best friends. You did a really great job expressing your feelings.

~Susie


"If we could read the secret history of our enemies, we should find in each man's life sorrow and suffering enough to disarm all hostility."
~Henry Wadsworth Longfellow "Driftwood"


Erin
Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
2 posted 2000-06-18 02:02 PM


someone once said if you want something very badly set it free, if it comes back to you its yours forever, if it doesnt it was never yours to begin with. let it go for now give it time. maybe this guy will realize what kind of person he lost. my boyfriend now was my best friend at one point before anything happen. but anyways i loved the poem it was beatuiful. it can really touch someones heart that you cared for but they didnt return the emotions.
Isabel Galaxia
Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733

3 posted 2000-06-18 05:01 PM


Hey, I can't say that I can totally relate, but I know how you're feeling.  Being hurt like that is one of the worst feelings in the world.  Maybe with time this guy will come to his senses, and, if not, then he didn't really deserve you in the first place.  The poem is really good, keep it up!  Best of luck to you
Bel

Munda
Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands
4 posted 2000-06-20 05:53 AM


Hope your heart will heal again. Very well done !
StarPryncess17
Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932
Colorado
5 posted 2000-06-20 11:43 AM


Dearest Angel~I'm sooooo very sorry your heart is hurting so badly! I will tell you this much...if he's worth your time, then he'll acknowledge what he is doing to you! Hopefully he'll come to his senses; If not, my dear you can do better!! I hope everything works out, my heart is with you. Love Always~*~Jessica~*~

"Love is the product of our discontentment with ourselves."
"Bleeding hearts release tears of fire"
"work like you don't need money, love like you've never been hurt,and live everyday as if it's your last"
"Shoot for the moon, if you shall fall short, you always have the stars to fall upon"

Jeremiah Johnson
Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
6 posted 2000-06-20 02:06 PM


first of all great work an di voted for you. but thats not the most important thing here. are you ok? if you need anyone to talk to you can email me. see i'm a 17 male i don't get along with many kids my age mostly older people because teenagers don't understand me and where i come from and all the pain in my past and why some things hurt a little more.

I'm the lord, I'm the havoc, I'm the soul



XTC_AngeL
Junior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 17
Australia
7 posted 2000-06-21 05:44 AM


I would just like to thank each of you for taking the time to reply to my poem, and care for my feelings. Thank you your responses have meant a lot to me and given me some confidence in my writting!
Luv alwayz, Nat


¤XTC AngeL¤

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural
8 posted 2007-11-18 09:41 AM


Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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