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Isabelle
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0 posted 06-16-2000 11:05 PM       View Profile for Isabelle   Email Isabelle   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Isabelle

Life is like a sandcastle
Build it with time and patience
A masterpiece so perfect
Then destroyed

No matter how many times you rebuild it
It'll eventually be destroyed

Life is like a sandcastle
You spend eternity trying to perfect it
Make it that special masterpiece
To just be destroyed and started over




 "Poetry is the music of the souls, and above all, of great and feeling souls."
~Voltaire~

© Copyright 2000 Jeanna - All Rights Reserved
StarPryncess17
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1 posted 06-17-2000 12:37 AM       View Profile for StarPryncess17   Email StarPryncess17   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit StarPryncess17's Home Page   View IP for StarPryncess17

oh dear, you're very right. The sad part is the negativity. I'm not one to judge--if you read any of my writing there's almost a guarantee that it'll be sad and depressing--it is a very realistic poem and I hope to see lots more from you! Don't think I've read too many of yours...sorry Love Always~*~Jessica~*~

 "Love is the product of our discontentment with ourselves."
"Bleeding hearts release tears of fire"
"work like you don't need money, love like you've never been hurt,and live everyday as if it's your last"
"Shoot for the moon, if you shall fall short, you always have the stars to fall upon"
Lani_DarkOne
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since 05-28-2000
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2 posted 06-17-2000 02:07 PM       View Profile for Lani_DarkOne   Email Lani_DarkOne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lani_DarkOne

Very very true and well put...nice poem.Keep writing!

"You could be my unintended
Choice, to live my life extended...." Muse

"Even when we're apart we'll still be under the same sky," LJ Smith

"Hiding in the musty attic is Elusive
She sits, cross legged in a midst dark cobwebs
Several forms scurry to seek shelter
Beneath her levitating shadow.
Her back rigid , eyes glassy
Gazes intently at time escaping
Sliding, smoothly, as sand sprinkles
Through the hour glass,
A single tear grazes her misty cheek." Lani
Isabelle
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since 08-25-99
Posts 176
Indiana


3 posted 06-17-2000 10:43 PM       View Profile for Isabelle   Email Isabelle   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Isabelle

Thanks for your comments. As if you hadn't noticed majority of my poems are negative. I have no idea why i'm fairly happy with things but it just is that way. Again thanks for the comments.

Isa  

"Poetry is the music of the souls, and above all, of great and feeling souls."
~Voltaire~

Alwye
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In the space between moments


4 posted 06-18-2000 12:42 AM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Definitely a great metaphor for life, Isabelle.  I enjoyed this greatly, but remember that life isn't always so bad.   Again, beautiful work.  

*Krista Knutson*

"Cherish your vision; Cherish your ideals; Cherish the music that stirs in your heart, the beauty that forms in your mind, the loveliness that drapes your purest thoughts. If you remain true to them, your world will at last be built." ~James Allen~


"We've made houses for hatred...it's time we made a place where people's souls may be seen and made safe"...~Jewel~
Erin
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since 06-15-2000
Posts 2681
~Chicago~


5 posted 06-18-2000 01:34 AM       View Profile for Erin   Email Erin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Erin

i never thought that life can be put as such an object but you showed me that it can be. i give you props for that poem because it is very true.
Angel
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6 posted 06-18-2000 04:04 PM       View Profile for Angel   Email Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Angel

New way to look at life, although it is negative  . Really, it isn't always so bad, but the poem was really great  .

~Susie


"If we could read the secret history of our enemies, we should find in each man's life sorrow and suffering enough to disarm all hostility."
~Henry W
Artic Wind
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Realm of Supernatural


7 posted 12-02-2007 08:25 PM       View Profile for Artic Wind   Email Artic Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artic Wind

Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND
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