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Trapped in the Halls of Highschool
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Trapped in the Halls of Highschool |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Nameless faces < !signature-->All too fake They smile and pretend everything is ok But truthfully, Blazing insecurity And doubt exist all too often Circus clowns putting on a show Gold fish trapped within A sea of betrayal "Love is the product of our discontentment with ourselves." "Bleeding hearts release tears of fire" "work like you don't need money, love like you've never been hurt,and live everyday as if it's your last" [This message has been edited by StarPryncess17 (edited 06-16-2000).] |
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Kandi Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354North of Hell |
I really like this one. Short but very insightful and deep. I think we all feel this way about our cozy little schools every now and then  Much Love Kandi ~*All that I have found in reason is reason just to not believe *~ ~*Things you see the way you see them will never be seen again*~ |
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Snickers Member
since 2000-05-25
Posts 88East Haddam, CT |
Jessica, This is such a true poem. I think everyone puts on their guards and hides behind them. And sometimes the true person is too scared or insecure to be themselves. It's an awful thing to be "trapped" like this. Well done. ~<3 Alwayz~ **Nikki** |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
wow this really struck something in me. this is really a GREAT poem and it speaks so much truth. "My heart is broke,but i have some glue. Help me inhale,and mend it with you. We'll float around,and hang out on clouds, then we'll come down,and have a hangover--have a hangover" |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Thank you guys for your replies! This poem just kinda came out on one of mt more cynical days. I love high school, but it seems to be so fake sometimes. Maybe it's just me. Love you all!! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~  "Love is the product of our discontentment with ourselves." "Bleeding hearts release tears of fire" "work like you don't need money, love like you've never been hurt,and live everyday as if it's your last" "Shoot for the moon, if you shall fall short, you always have the stars to fall upon" |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
this is a great poem. i to feel this way to see so many people living fake lives it makes me sad for them that they can't be happy with the true them but hey i'll be out of highschool at the end of this school year anyway than i'll be in the army for a break then it all starts over in collage. I'm the lord, I'm the havoc, I'm the soul |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
I liked this one a lot. I always think about things like this. Keep up the awesome writing .~Susie "If we could read the secret history of our enemies, we should find in each man's life sorrow and suffering enough to disarm all hostility." ~Henry W |
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mickel2995 Junior Member
since 2000-05-24
Posts 48 |
Once again Jess- I know all too well what you speak of. Good job expressing in that short of time what most of us aren't able too. I like it and next year, we will be some of the honest people in our school! Micale |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Oh my friend, do you go to my high school? Anyway, this poem send a powerful message in a few short lines. A hard thing to do, I know. Thank you for sharing it with us! "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde |
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Ashiraladoni Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 52Duluth, MN, USA |
Insecurity, doubt, people living double lives, it all happens in high school. And you don't realize it's happening until close to the end, but at least there are some who can see it early on. Good poem. |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
excellent sentiments here....yes, sometimes it seems like everyone around you is wearing masks and uttering meaningless empty words...and it can get rather suffocating...like the reference to circus clowns...cos in my opinion, sometimes its almost comical to see their fake selves....like the ending too...thought that was brilliant this is the first piece i have read from you but i do hope it wont be the last  |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
Hey Jess...sorry it took me so long to get to this one. Thanx for reminding me how glad I am that high school is a mere distant memory. I'm outy. Jeremy "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
VERY GOOD POEM...IT STATES NOTHING BUT THE TRUTH ABOUT "FRIENDS" IN HIGH SCHOOL.YOU CATCH A CASE OF THE FAKE PEOPLE THERE. YOU KNOW WHAT I MEAN. I JUST THANK GOD THAT I AM FINALLY THROUGH.NO MORE SO CALLED FRIENDS. DID ANYONE EVER WONDER WHY PEOPLE PUT K.I.T?? EVEN PEOPLE THAT YOU BARELY TALKED TO..THATS WHAT I FOUND AMUSING.. I THINK ITS JUST LIKE THE "THING" TO DO WHEN YOU SIGN YEARBOOKS...HAHA I GIVE YOU PROPS FOR THIS POEM THOUGH.. ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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Lani_DarkOne Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 152UK |
I have felt like this MY WHOLE LIFE!! I spend alot of the time analysing people's behaviour (coz I'm so bored) and it just FRUSTRATES me to see how sad it is that people have to 'live up' to others 'expectations'(which are completely superficial). I admit I SOMETIMES fall into this catagory...but when i do it feels 'not true'. Sorry for going on...your poem was very perceptive and I really liked it...full of honesty if it may be cynical. "You could be my unintended Choice, to live my life extended...." Muse "Even when we're apart we'll still be under the same sky," LJ Smith "Hiding in the musty attic is Elusive She sits, cross legged in a midst dark cobwebs Several forms scurry to seek shelter Beneath her levitating shadow. Her back rigid , eyes glassy Gazes intently at time escaping Sliding, smoothly, as sand sprinkles Through the hour glass, A single tear grazes her misty cheek." Lani |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Jeremiah~You're lucky! lol Thanks for the reply! Glad to hear you liked the poem! Susie~thanks! Glad to hear that I'm not the only cynical person around here. lol Micale~yeah well girl, it's comoing quick! can't wait!! SISTAS-4-LIFE!!! LoveBug~unfortunately yes. Actually, I love high school as well as all my friends, sometimes I just look around and see, well nothing. Just a bunch of people acting far from their true selves...and for what?! To make a name for themselves. Thanks for your reply. Ashiraladoni~I think people realize it but chise to ignore it because if they spoke out they would look like "the bad guy" for doubting everyone's accountability. Thanks for your reply! kaile~yes, many thoughtless words are not just uttered, but thrown around like nothing. And it's those words that leave so many people completely distraught.Thanks for understanding! Jeremy~glad you were relieved by my stress. LOL j/k. I'm glad that one of us is away from the chaos! Erin~LoL I totally know what you mean about the k*i*t thing! haha funny, people put their numbers in yearbooks, ok well only to be nice?! 90% of the time, you know that you never plan on using it. Oh well, guess it's just another little cliche of the many in the years of High School. Thanks for your reply! Glad you're relieved of this "fakeness" Lani~many of us sometimes fall unto the wrath of expectations...I'm not saying that's bad. Now, if you were walking around wearing stuff only because your best friend bought it too and you were only doing stuff because so and so liked it...thats different. I seem to find it comical to watch people and look inside their hearts...they're all screaming and wanting to be themselves...but they won't allow it. I guess that's High School for ya. Thanks for understanding! ~*~Love is the product of our dicontentment with ourselves~*~ ~*~SMILE! It makes your butt shine!~*~ |
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MysticalAngel Junior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 23 |
I really liked this one... short and sweet... but spoke so much truth! School doesn seem fake sometimes.. I agree completely! Well said! mysticalangel ** If something is too good to be true... 9 times out of 10 it is ** |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
MysticalAngel~I'm glad you like it! Thank you for your kind words! It makes me feel a lot better about my poetry. ~*~Love is the product of our dicontentment with ourselves~*~ ~*~SMILE! It makes your butt shine!~*~ |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Great poem, Jessica. Alot of things in life seem to be fake imitations instead of the wonderful things they could be. Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
short and to the point. this really is what high school felt like for me. especially my first two years. good work jes. |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
I like this. It's short and nice and to the point. While I'm not in highschool, I feel the same. I'll get there soon though. One more year. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
What a great post to bring back since schools are going to be starting soon (if they haven't already). The sense of confinment in this one greatly expresses how so many people feel. It's very well written, glad I had the chance to read it. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
jessica~~~i know i replied to this one already but do you see how many old poems we pulled up??? this one was my favorite by you just because its all so true...by the way where have you been???i havent seen any new posts by you lately.. ~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~ |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Maybe, I should start calling you the Pryncess of Poetry... You never seize to amaze me As i wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
Jess, Great poem, and very true. Keep up the great work. Chel "True friends stab you in the front" "True love last forever" |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
wow guys! I didn't imagine seeing this one again! Thxs for bringing it back from the dead! hehe. Erin~hey sweetheart, I know I've been gone for a while, guess I just don't have much to say (haha believe it or not) I'll try to get some of my most recent stuff up here within the next few days...feel free to rip it apart! thxs again hun, you're a doll!!Acire~thxs!! you're a sweet heart! everyone else~I'm glad you liked it thxs for the kind words! ~*~Why is it that love always starts with a HuG grows with a kIsS and ends with a TeAr?!?~*~ |
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Emmaline Junior Member
since 2000-08-20
Posts 15 |
StarPryncess17 ~ I really liked this poem. It is so true about life in high school. Keep up the good work. ~ Emma |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Emma~thxs for the reply, I'm glad you liked it! thanks again... ~*~Why is it that love always starts with a HuG grows with a kIsS and ends with a TeAr?!?~*~ |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
how true can this be? gosh! i know what you're talking about..."Circus clowns putting on a show" i'll say amen to that! great words... salma |
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*ChrisLover* Junior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 46erie, colo |
hey jess well i remeber doing this in 2nd hour english last year..... and i remeber mine being almost exactly the same!!;O) hehe... but anhow... this wass a great poem... and if jyou really think about it on the first day of school ppl really do this stuffa lot!! lol.. but i guess ill let you go talk to you soon.... call me!!! love ya, netto Everything happens for a reason.. sometimes it's bad, but sometime it's good!! just remeber there's people out here who care! |
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Wicced_Witch Member
since 2000-02-06
Posts 110Clarksville, TN, USA |
Well what can I say. It was short and to the point, and so full of truth. I liked it. It is sad though, that everyone tries to act how they think other's would want them to and not be themselves. Luckily, this is my last year, though I can't help but think it will probably be the same way in college. Well great job. ~~Stephanie~~ [This message has been edited by Wicced_Witch (edited 08-24-2000).] |
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