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Snickers
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since 2000-05-25
Posts 88
East Haddam, CT

0 posted 2000-06-16 08:13 AM


Hey everyone!! OK, this iz weird, but last night I just started writing this, as if I already knew exactly what it was to say.  I know some of it might not make much sense, and maybe I could come up with a better title.  So I'm open to criticisim b/c this really comes from deep inside and I want it to be the best it can be!! So please, feel free to rip away at it!! Thanks!  (it's kinda long)
~<3 Alwayz~
**Nikki**
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
So what now?
What am I supposed to do?
Keep waiting?
Keep waiting for something new,
Something to look forward to?
Well I'm tired of waiting
I'm sick of debating
With myself, by myself
Even my health
is deteriorating
My exterior's fading
The interior's waiting
To be noticed,
To be loved.
Never been loved before,
always longer for more
More than I've ever had,
could ever get
I wouldn't bet
I'll never let
My heart be exposed to pain
Maybe I'm insane
or loving impaired
Maybe I'm just scared
Don't know how to be
what you want,
what you need
I need love,
I need you
Don't know what to do
Not good enough for you
Nothing to look forward to
I'm confused,
abused,
amazing amused
by my stupidity
lack of knowledge
to acknowledge
what's wrong in my life,
the cause of my strife
The reasons for my pain
Am I insane?
What's to gain?
If I admit my weaknesses,
my problems,
pet peeves
Would you leave?
I've been decieved
so many times
and time again
I can't trust
there must
be something I can do
I wish I knew
Why I'm afraid
I've made
it impossible to feel
something real
To love,
to be loved.
Love me,
for me,
And maybe I will be
able to please you,
seize you,
tease you.
Look past my eyes,
beneath the lies.
Into my heart,
but don't tear it apart.
Broken hearts scar
So far
I know
I cannot be
what I'm not
I can only be me.
So accept me please.

© Copyright 2000 Nikki - All Rights Reserved
Kandi
Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354
North of Hell
1 posted 2000-06-16 11:55 AM


WOW! I REALLY loved this poem Snickers.  The rhyme scheme was clever and good use of words to describe exactly how you feel.  I love poems that I can relate to, and I definitely related to this poem. and i like the title the way it is.  We all just want to be accepted and don't want people to expect us to be mroe than exactly what we are. I have a poem that goes along with yours nicely, although it's much shorter...its called Expectations. I think I'll post it so please read it if u get a chance.
The more I read your work the more respect I have for you as a writer.  You're very good.
~~kandi~~

 ~*All that I have found in reason is reason just to not believe *~

~*Things you see the way you see them will never be seen again*~

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