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Kandi
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since 2000-06-14
Posts 354
North of Hell

0 posted 2000-06-15 09:32 PM


This poem is...one of my more abstract ones. lol. Even I am not completely sure what it means.  Anyhow, it's open to whatever you want to make of it.
~Kristin~

~*~*Falling Toward Forever ~*~*
You said, "Stand up and walk with me - maybe we'll find forever."
Forever - I don't know what that means to you.
They say it's all eternity, forever young, forever friends
I'll love you forever, a lifetime it never ends
It's the only thing worth fighting for but the hardest fight there is.
Nothin is more precious, more meaningful than this -
to take something to forever and open up the doors
to hold on to forever, and then you've made it yours.
But do we have to find it or does forever come to us?
And what is an eternity in a world of change and lose?
Some things you just don't know and can't try to understand
No guarantees or warnings; just do the best you can.
Forever - I'm not sure what that means for us.
They say it's for the rest of time, to hell and back again
It's everywhere you're going and everywhere you've been
It's what's keeping us together, and if we should ever part,
I'll let go of you but keep forever in my heart
They say it never dies, although it can fade in time
It's the perfect reality that exists only in your mind.
It's the only thing we're fighting for, yet we don't know what it is
All we can do is aim for it and hope that we don't miss
So take my hand and walk with me - maybe we'll find forever.



 ~*All that I have found in reason is reason just to not believe *~

~*Things you see the way you see them will never be seen again*~

© Copyright 2000 Kristin - All Rights Reserved
Jeremy Halstead
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since 2000-06-01
Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A
1 posted 2000-06-16 03:41 AM


Kris, now that I've read some more of your work, I am sincerely flattered by your praise.  You have a very keen knack for what poetry is supposed to be.  By the way, the idea bheind your poem was interesting, but the depth and accuracy that you dove into it with truly impacted me.  I'm gonna go read yer other one now.

Jeremy Halstead

 "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade."

Snickers
Member
since 2000-05-25
Posts 88
East Haddam, CT
2 posted 2000-06-16 08:22 AM


Kris,
This is great, I love it!     I've only read a few of your poems, but I love your work.  You have great talent and I'm glad that you joined Passions!   I've also found that I can relate to a lot of it.  So keep up the excellent work and I'll keep reading!!  

~<3 Alwayz~
**Nikki**

Crystalina123
Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 228

3 posted 2000-06-16 09:11 AM


Kris,
I like this poem. What I like most is the rhyme scheem and that it's fluid throughout most of the poem. While your idea maybe abstract I think all of us can relate to searching for that elusive forever.

Crystal

 "The worst of what people do to one another is deceive.
Because when you love someone you control their version
of reality. If you lie to them that's like making them
autistic so that what they believe is reality is in fact,
not their true situation at all."

It's not the angry words that break the heart, it's the silence.

Someone said that true love is like a ghost -- often spoke of but never seen.
I've seen both and yet in my darkest hours, tend to believe that neither exits.

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