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Jenabou
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since 2000-06-13
Posts 215
Oklahoma/Nova Scotia Canada/USA

0 posted 2000-06-15 08:59 AM



Sitting here
alone,in the darkness of my silence

I am waiting;waiting for you
but you'll never come

I can feel the walls closing in on me
i can feel them thrieving on my pain

You said you'd always be there for me,no matter what
But where are you now? where are you when I need you the most?

I gave everything to make you happy
And asked for nothing in return,untill now

But your still not here
and you never will be

So im sitting here,alone
drowning in my tears

© Copyright 2000 Jenna-Nicole Boutilier - All Rights Reserved
anomaly187
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 284
San Francisco,CA,US
1 posted 2000-06-15 05:41 PM


all i can say is amazing.you are able to capture your loneliness and grief through words.
mr0001
Junior Member
since 2000-06-09
Posts 39

2 posted 2000-06-16 12:36 PM


another good one    i absolutely love the way you write...the way you arrange your stanza's really help intensify your emotion and get the readers attention.  well done!!

    mr





 "crazy" is just who you are...amplified.

some people draw the outlines in life, i chose to add the color.


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