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Jenabou
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since 2000-06-13
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Oklahoma/Nova Scotia Canada/USA

0 posted 2000-06-13 06:22 PM



When i look in the mirror
I dont like the reflection starring back

Its not me,im no where to be found

You told me i was getting fat
so i stopped eating

You told me I wasn't pretty enough
so i wore more make-up

You told me my hair was too long
so i cut it

You slowly molded me to your desire
Im barely myself anymore...im parcticly you

And no matter how hard i try,i will always be you
cos when you command i listen,
and each time i kiss a part of myself good-bye

© Copyright 2000 Jenna-Nicole Boutilier - All Rights Reserved
Snickers
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since 2000-05-25
Posts 88
East Haddam, CT
1 posted 2000-06-13 07:22 PM


This is really great!! It doesn't rhyme or anything, but it doesn't need to.  You've really expressed yourself and I love it when you can tell what the person is feeling by reading their poetry.  Don't let anyone make you do anything.  You are you, and people have got to accept that and love you as you are.  Don't ever change for anyone except yourself, it isn't worth it.  

~<3 Alwayz~
**Nikki**

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2 posted 2000-06-13 09:48 PM


Hon, I know how this can feel, but you should never change any part of you for someone else. You are just fine the way you are, and if someone can't see that, it's their problem, not yours.

 "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde

mr0001
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since 2000-06-09
Posts 39

3 posted 2000-06-13 11:50 PM


ok -- the day you look in the mirror and don't see yourself anymore -- is the day you need to lose this guy!!!  i know it easier said then done, believe me i know!! i hope that you realize that you are perfect just the way you are and that if someone is trying to mold you into something different, they don't really love you...anyway, that's my two cents (or two dollars) good poem - as always    i really love the way you write, your style and everything -- well done  

       mr




 "crazy" is just who you are...amplified.

some people draw the outlines in life, i chose to add the color.


amazon_lover
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since 2000-04-09
Posts 491
Dublin,Ireland
4 posted 2000-06-14 09:50 AM


Hi Jenabou
I have even told my love about all these things. But I never did it with the intention of moulding her but to make her believe that her picture is still vivid in my memmories and I can't stop thinking abt her. I guess she too mistook it and shame on me for everything I did. I'll never get a chance to rectify what I did....

Sincerely
A_L

TearsOfPearls
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since 1999-09-23
Posts 322
Vereeniging, South-Africa
5 posted 2000-06-14 01:24 PM


Hi Jenabou.

This poem expresses alot, and I just want to add to what the others said. God made you, and in His eyes you are perect. If the people of this world can't see that, to hell with them.

You should never give up on yourself, for now one

 Waves...amazing hey? Wind blowing over smoothe ocean water creates shear. The longer the wind blows, and the futher the fetch, the more energy gets transferred from the wind to the water. What started off as a breeze 1 000km away, ends up as a glass-faced barrel at some far off beach.

mickel2995
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since 2000-05-24
Posts 48

6 posted 2000-06-14 11:55 PM


Wow, this is really, good!!  This poem teaches girls (or boys), that if they are changing for someone that they "care" about, they're not alone and it is not right. I particularuly love theis style of writing! good job!! Micale
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