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Jenabou
Member

since 2000-06-13

Posts 215
Oklahoma/Nova Scotia Canada/USA

0 posted 2000-06-13 06:16 PM

You've hurt me so many times
You've chipped away at my heart forever

But I cast it aside,because we are in love,right?

You've betrayed me and left me cold
You've left me alone and in tears

But i cast it aside,because we are in love,right?

You've broken so many promises
You've said so many cruel words

But i cast it aside,because we are in love,right?

You've lied to me over and over
You've made me feel small and insignificant

But i cast it aside,because we are in love,right?
WRONG

mr0001
Junior Member

since 2000-06-09

Posts 39

1 posted 2000-06-13 11:57 PM

once again -- wonderful!!! the way you wrote this one really helps the ending have such a powerful effect!! can't wait to read more

mr

"crazy" is just who you are...amplified.

some people draw the outlines in life, i chose to add the color.

Child of the Stars

Senior Member

since 2000-09-07

Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI

2 posted 2000-10-17 07:49 PM

Hey! I just thought this was great and should be read by some new people. I love the ending!!

~Carly

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Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2000-10-17 07:56 PM

So hey yea i agree wit child.....this did need more replies and here i am to do so. Eneh Weh this poem was interesting and i did like it a lot. The formatting was nice and the ending was a quick finish to it all.....strong too

"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

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Lakewalker
Member Elite

since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

4 posted 2000-10-17 08:22 PM

That's right it's wrong!!!! Powerful message here

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

5 posted 2000-10-17 09:50 PM

Very cool poem!! Hellz yeah its wrong to be treated that way...People get blinded by love and convince themselfes that this is all apart of love and the person only does such things cause they love them....then finally they come to see thats not how love is and what the other person is doing is WRONG. You send out a very powerful point!! Good job!!

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