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Snickers Member
since 2000-05-25
Posts 88East Haddam, CT |
If God could speak, what would he say? Would he scold or praise? To see the way we spend our lives, and how we waste our days. Creulty, crime, jealousy, and hate. We've vandalized God's golden gate. If God could speak, what would he say? Would he punish us for our wrong ways? Adam and Eve have evolved to this: massacure, war, tantrums, and fits. We've been cleansed of the original sin. But to cleanse all the others, where to begin? We've taken God's paradise, and turned it upside-down. Forget natural disasters, we're a disaster in our own. If God could speak he'd be yelling now, upset about what we've done. Or maybe he'd be crying, because we've ruined life for everyone. Some will be punished and others rewarded, depending on what we've done. And in the end we'll all find out, if we've lost or won. So be careful about what you do in life. If you're oblivious you might cause your own strife. When the time comes, God will speak to us all, and just what he says in unmistakably your call. ~<3 Alwayz~ **Nikki** |
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Jenabou Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 215Oklahoma/Nova Scotia Canada/USA |
This is a beautiful poem I dont think there are words i can use to describe how touching this is. it moved me you are very talented ill be looking for more of your work keep it up!  [This message has been edited by Jenabou (edited 06-13-2000).] |
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mr0001 Junior Member
since 2000-06-09
Posts 39 |
this is absolutely beautiful!!! and it is so true!! i have no idea what God would say to us but i don't think it would be "well done my good and faithful servant(s)." i am just so thankful that HE is a forgiving God, ya know?? anyway -- very good poem and well written too  mr  "crazy" is just who you are...amplified. some people draw the outlines in life, i chose to add the color. |
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Novacaine For The Soul Member
since 2000-05-26
Posts 122New Orleans |
dear snickers, while i understand the sentiment of your poem, i have to disagree on a number of points as a theologian... the God of the Israelites is not a hasty God, but a God of patience and love... He is a God of justice, but justice comes in His good time and has come to many of "adam's children" long before our time... we are not the first to hate, war, and pervert... and we will not be the last... sadly, we will continue to be lost sheep and He will continue to judge us justly in His time and to love us despite our folly... sincerely, a sad tomato you're such a beautiful freak... i wish there were more just like you... |
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Snickers Member
since 2000-05-25
Posts 88East Haddam, CT |
Thanx so much for the replies guyz!! I really appreciate it, and I'm glad that you liked my poem!  Sad Tomato (May I inquire as to why you are a sad tomato?), I see where you are coming from. But I believe that religion iz very...well varied. Everyone has their own beliefs about God and Heaven and everything else that comes with. I personally agree with you to a certain extent, but sometimes I have to wonder if He will always be forgiving. Just how much can he forgive and forget? How much sin can we commit without going to Hell? These are questions that no one has to answer to, but I'm sure I'm not the only one who thinks about them. When it's time for God to judge us all, just what will he say? Thank you for sharing your opinion. ~<3 Alwayz~ **Nikki** |
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TearsOfPearls Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 322Vereeniging, South-Africa |
This really is a wonderul poem. Since my friends was killed almost two moths ago, I have been thinking alot about death and about standing infront of God and telling Him what I did with my life. God is mercyful, He will forgive everytime when you go to Him and ask forgiveness and really are sorry about what you did, and the best thing is He forgets about it. So i you do the same thing again and again and again and ask for forgiveness, God forgives you asif it was the first time you asked Him, isn't that just great!! But it is true what you said in your poem, He sure can't be happy about what we are doing, and we should open our eyes. Once again great poem! Waves...amazing hey? Wind blowing over smoothe ocean water creates shear. The longer the wind blows, and the futher the fetch, the more energy gets transferred from the wind to the water. What started off as a breeze 1 000km away, ends up as a glass-faced barrel at some far off beach. |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is a beautiful and true poem. Yes, we will all be judged one day. We will have to stand before God and tell Him why we do all these things. He is a merciful God, but we should still keep that in mind. "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
In my eyes all sins are forgiven...Except for one and that is suicide...God judges us as we live...Not by what we do...Because if he judged us by what we do why would such horrible things go on in this world... This was a very good piece...And I am glad to have the chance to read it...Its a little late but I have been looking through the older poems... It TaKeS a MiNuTe To LiKe SoMeOnE, aN hOuR tO hAvE a CrUsH oN sOmEoNe & A dAy To FaLl In LoVe, BuT iT tAkEs A lIfEtImE tO fOrGeT sOmEoNe. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
This poem has a great message behind it, that we will be judged by what we do so we should do good. That's what I took away from it anyway Wonderful! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Thank you so much for sharing this poem with us. What a great message to relay to everyone. It never hurts to remind us once in a while what life is all about. Maybe, He is upset of the things we as a people have done, but as you too said He judges us one by one. I just hope that I can be one of those that actually make Him proud. great job I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
So yea this poem was great. I liked the topic...nice nice.....hope to see you post more around here.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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