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Alina Le Ann
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since 2000-01-30
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0 posted 2000-06-12 02:09 AM



A Secret So Special

Close the door behind you
I have a secret to tell
A secret so special
Please keep it between us two

This secret I hold dear
In my heart it is chained
A secret so special
Let me whisper in your ear

This information to you I gave
My best friend, I know you won't tell
A secret so special
Promised to go to the grave

You told a friend
And she told others
A secret so special
To my tears there is no end

The pain burns at my heart's core
Our friendship fades away
A secret so special
Is a secret no more

© Copyright 2000 Alina Le Ann - All Rights Reserved
mickel2995
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since 2000-05-24
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1 posted 2000-06-12 05:46 PM


This is an incredible poem !! If you have had to experience this awful feeling of being betrayed and mislead and hurt I am so sorry!  I have been there before too, and never again will you trust anyone else like you had before. I think this piece is an excellent piece and you should be very proud of it!  good job!  Micale
Angel
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since 1999-07-02
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2 posted 2000-06-12 10:21 PM


Aren't best friends great? Sorry, my "best friend" is acting like a jerk, so I know how it feels, and it sucks.  I love the poem, it was written perfectly, and full of emotion. Great job  .

~Susie


 "If we could read the secret history of our enemies, we should find in each man's life sorrow and suffering enough to disarm all hostility."
~Henry Wadsworth Longfellow "Driftwood"


The Mastermind
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3 posted 2000-06-12 10:45 PM


Alina Le Ann,

This poem is very beautiful, and well written. It was very deep, and held a very passionate meaning behind it - a definition of what real frineds should be. An excellent piece of work, and I will look forward to future works.

LoveBug
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4 posted 2000-06-13 10:27 AM


It always hurts to be betrayed by anyone, and it's even worse when it's your best friend. I hope writing this helped you some.

 "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde

Acies
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5 posted 2000-06-13 10:45 AM


I hope this experience won't hinder you from trusting other people.  Just remember that each person is different.
Snickers
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since 2000-05-25
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6 posted 2000-06-13 04:49 PM


This is great.  Doesn't it suck when your so-called friends blab your inner-most secrets?  The feeling of betrayl and backstabbingness is awful, but i think everyone has felt it at least once.  Hopefully you will be able to realize who your true friends are.  Keep writing!

~<3 Alwayz~
**Nikki**

Alina Le Ann
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since 2000-01-30
Posts 40
INDIANA
7 posted 2000-06-14 08:14 PM


WOW!!!
Thank you all so much for your replies. I had no idea that my poem would reach so many people. I can't explain my reaction to the things I've just read but it was a great feeling! Thank you all so much again!

Alina Le Ann

Kandi
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since 2000-06-14
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8 posted 2000-06-15 03:55 PM


Alina~
Your poem literally gave me chills.  I wasn't expecting the mood to change so drastically in the last few stanzas.  I thought it was going to be a cute little poem, but it was much deeper then I expected. Your really talented! Keep it up.
PS - I know what u mean about reading people's replies giving u a great feeling! That's why I love this place so much - everyone is so supportive! It's so touching.

Take care!
~* Kandi/Kris~*


 ~*All that I have found in reason is reason just to not believe *~

~*Things you see the way you see them will never be seen again*~

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