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Two older poems of mine (reposts from teen #2)
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Two older poems of mine (reposts from teen #2) |
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Lucius Cade Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 235Saskatchewan |
I am going to post both poems in this one topic because I dont want to waste space on the page. You can reply to one or both if you like, both were written by me a while ago when various things were going on in my life. "What difference does it make?" this world is no place for me what difference does it make if i go to school tommorow if i get good sleep tonight will it effect my future what does it hold for me some job, proffession, retirement death could be seconds away what difference does it make if I am a lawyer, or a teacher a police man, or a killer maybe i dont care what happens so why try in life, why live for death, i am being shaped by the world around me why sleep tonight...... why wake tommorow....... what difference will it make this is what has become of me Second poem "What doesn't kill me now" Whats the solution For my insanity Its my new years revolution To forget and move on One eighth of my life on this earth Was spent in love with you Desperately searching for some form of rebirth To no avail, I find emptyness What doesnt kill me now Can only make me stronger But I often question how I will survive through this But then I think... I can handle this After all I am a man So I leave you with a quote From a favorite emo band "and i'm certain that if i drive into those trees, it would make less of a mess, than she's made of me..." Lucidity is the answer to all problems |
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Novacaine For The Soul Member
since 2000-05-26
Posts 122New Orleans |
dear lucius: while i'd be the first to admit that this isn't your BEST work, it certainly stands up against most everything else i've read... particularly as free-verse... i'm not much of an authority on this style of verse, but i DO know what i like and what i dont like, and it usually has to do with the content and appearance of the work and i think in both cases you have a solid and meaningful bit of both... i particularly like the first poem, since i've often wondered the same thing... not sure if you ever came to a conclusion on the matter you address there, but this was mine: it may not make a difference to the world as a whole, but it will make a world of difference to at least one special person... anyway.. i wont try to persuade you, i'll just let you think about it... sincerely, a sad tomato you're such a beautiful freak... i wish there were more just like you... |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
I really do like both of these and can relate to each. I've often wondered about the first and have been through the second. They were both really good  .~Susie "If we could read the secret history of our enemies, we should find in each man's life sorrow and suffering enough to disarm all hostility." ~Henry Wadsworth Longfellow "Driftwood" |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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