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I Can Feel The Fire

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dragonpoe
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0 posted 01-05-2001 08:31 PM       View Profile for dragonpoe   Email dragonpoe   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for dragonpoe

*NOt sure about this one guys and gals, let me know what you think*

I Can Feel The Fire

My sun has deserted me,
Leaving a gaping hole in my
Skies, leaving nothing but smoke
I can feel the heat as pain sears
Me and my heart begins to wilt.

Oh, lover, had I only known
That yours were words so untrue
Perhaps I would have been
Prepared but my naivete’ got in
The way and I feel it now.

Never had I been able to
Imagine that love could hurt
So bad, and then I met you
And history was made and I
Am no longer naïve, nor
Innocent.

Fire burns the best of us,
It scars and the smoke chokes
And we learn to stay clear of fire
But fire comes in many disguises.

Joann Renee' Muszynski 1/5/01



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1 posted 01-05-2001 08:50 PM       View Profile for Ginners   Email Ginners   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ginners

I think that it was good, maybe changing the ending a little would make it better but other than that i liked it

"I'll build a wall if we can keep them on the other side"---NIN
"There is no always forever, just this"-the cure
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