I think the idea behind this is wonderful...every day things that can and do happen. I agree with the above statement though, just need to tell a bit more of the story here...tell why she be white trash (or why you think that) and why you are in the bar.
This sort of reminds me of the way a song I like very much is written...Don't know your age, but if you can find the song, you might see what I mean. It is called "never say never" by Romeo Void. Not saying you will like the music just will understand what I ment by it reminding me of your style here.
"There is an alter ego which
dwells in every soul..."
"I am as I am, nothing more, nothing less,
I am tears of pain, tears of Death.