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No Longer A God
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No Longer A God |
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a-alibaster Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 392
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It has been an extremely long time sence I have been to passions and I have missed all of your words! I had found that my pen had dried up and my forever flowing words had ceased to run, as well as my webdesign buisness began to take up the majority of my time...for all of that I apologize over and over. I found a bit of insperation this morning over a cup of coffe and wrote my first poem in approx. 4 months...I hope you enjoy! No Longer A God When I learn to feel I will no longer be a God with alabaster hands wrapped with barbed wire bands dipped unforgivingly within your souls insanity. When I learn to hate the pain I will no longer be a God with cold breath embracing your fear of death, rocking gently the decent of your humanity. I am no longer a God ! (c)a-alibaster 2001 "There is an alter ego which dwells in every soul..." a-alibaster "I am as I am, nothing more, nothing less, I am tears of pain, tears of Death. |
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Dark_kisses_Within Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680Kansas |
Well it sure is nice to see you back once again!  Your writing is as beautiful as it ever was. Great work, Mags No person is worth your tears, and the only one that is ...... will never make you cry |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
hello ... i really like this piece, but i was wondering what you mean by capitalizing "God" ... i know this is not the critical board, but i want to hear if there is a specific reason behind it? ... "When I learn to feel I will no longer be a God" or "When i learn to feel I will no longer be God" or "When I learn to feel I will no longer be a god" still, a very well done piece ... |
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a-alibaster Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 392 |
To be correct grammer wise I should not have written the word God as I did...it is just a quirk of my own, I 'posse...sence I believe in no "god" as others do . per say. So I do apologize for the way I wrote it. Until...ali "There is an alter ego which dwells in every soul..." a-alibaster "I am as I am, nothing more, nothing less, I am tears of pain, tears of Death. |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
no need to apologize or change anything ... but you do realize how much it changes the intent of the piece ... thanks again for a good read ... be well |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked this one a lot......keep posting.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
Greatly enjoyed this one. Alot of power within it, strongly written. With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free.. dragonpoe |
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