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No Longer A God

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a-alibaster
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0 posted 01-03-2001 10:58 AM       View Profile for a-alibaster   Email a-alibaster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit a-alibaster's Home Page   View IP for a-alibaster

It has been an extremely long time sence I have been to passions and I have missed all of your words!
I had found that my pen had dried up and my forever flowing words had ceased to run, as well as my webdesign buisness began to take up the majority of my time...for all of that I apologize over and over.
I found a bit of insperation this morning over a cup of coffe and wrote my first poem in approx. 4 months...I hope you enjoy!

No Longer A God

When I learn to feel
I will no longer be a God
with alabaster hands
wrapped with barbed wire bands
dipped unforgivingly
within your souls insanity.
When I learn to hate the pain
I will no longer be a God
with cold breath
embracing your fear of death,
rocking gently
the decent of your humanity.
I am no
longer
a
God
!
(c)a-alibaster 2001


"There is an alter ego which
dwells in every soul..."
a-alibaster

"I am as I am, nothing more, nothing less,
I am tears of pain, tears of Death.
© Copyright 2001 a-alibaster (H.A.R.) - All Rights Reserved
Dark_kisses_Within
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since 03-21-2000
Posts 678
Kansas


1 posted 01-03-2001 01:21 PM       View Profile for Dark_kisses_Within   Email Dark_kisses_Within   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Dark_kisses_Within's Home Page   View IP for Dark_kisses_Within

Well it sure is nice to
see you back once again!

Your writing is as beautiful
as it ever was.
Great work,
Mags


No person is worth your tears, and the only one that is ...... will never make you cry

ma miller
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since 07-11-2000
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2 posted 01-03-2001 01:29 PM       View Profile for ma miller   Email ma miller   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ma miller

hello ... i really like this piece, but i was wondering what you mean by capitalizing "God" ... i know this is not the critical board, but i want to hear if there is a specific reason behind it? ...

"When I learn to feel
I will no longer be a God"

or

"When i learn to feel
I will no longer be God"

or

"When I learn to feel
I will no longer be a god"

still, a very well done piece ...

a-alibaster
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since 01-08-2000
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3 posted 01-03-2001 01:46 PM       View Profile for a-alibaster   Email a-alibaster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit a-alibaster's Home Page   View IP for a-alibaster

To be correct grammer wise I should not have written the word God as I did...it is just a quirk of my own, I 'posse...sence I believe in no "god" as others do . per say.
So I do apologize for the way I wrote it.
Until...ali


"There is an alter ego which
dwells in every soul..."
a-alibaster

"I am as I am, nothing more, nothing less,
I am tears of pain, tears of Death.
ma miller
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since 07-11-2000
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4 posted 01-03-2001 02:11 PM       View Profile for ma miller   Email ma miller   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ma miller

no need to apologize or change anything ... but you do realize how much it changes the intent of the piece ... thanks again for a good read ... be well
Dopey Dope
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5 posted 01-04-2001 02:29 PM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dopey Dope

I liked this one a lot......keep posting.


I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily
dragonpoe
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since 11-12-2000
Posts 617
Palm Bay, Florida


6 posted 01-05-2001 08:02 PM       View Profile for dragonpoe   Email dragonpoe   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for dragonpoe

Greatly enjoyed this one. Alot of power within it, strongly written.

With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free..
dragonpoe
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