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brian madden
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0 posted 12-30-2000 11:15 AM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for brian madden

I have denounced the mechanics
of Catholicism far too often,
to claim an empathy
for divine creation.

Miracles for me are foreign
day dreams, but internally
I held the naked heavens
without indication of  religion.

It was in the birth of galaxies
that lovers were conceived,
though the stars scattered to dust,
and we fell to earth as halves.    

This alchemy unites us:
separate elements  
in forlorn distance,
but singular in heart  

My prayers are not born of masses,
They are all dedications to you,
my angel loved sexually and purely.
Your temple is where I orbit.

Siamese lovers are we,
rediscovering the lost wonders
across techno-communication
until we share the same skin.

Every atom of you radiates
this purgatory, you are my everything.
And soon will be for an eternity.
In this life wait for me, I will be with you shortly.  


In the morning I am a recluse,lost in memory,ideal situations and convulsions... They built pop mart for Bono so he could gaze out across the bay and sing about mountains maybe" Whipping boy

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Ginners
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1 posted 12-30-2000 12:30 PM       View Profile for Ginners   Email Ginners   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ginners

I liked this very much especially this part "It was in the birth of galaxies
that lovers were conceived,
though the stars scattered to dust,
and we fell to earth as halves"
your poem says to me that lovers are chosen in the begining of time and will eventually find eachother and unite until they for a whole.  is a very nice and romantic thought

"I'll build a wall if we can keep them on the other side"---NIN
"There is no always forever, just this"-the cure
HiddenSparklez
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2 posted 12-30-2000 03:36 PM       View Profile for HiddenSparklez   Email HiddenSparklez   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for HiddenSparklez

You've chosen very intense words to use in your poem which makes the whole piece very intense. Like how you explored your relationship to a point where you had me thinking the whole time what you were feeling.
Severn
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3 posted 12-30-2000 05:21 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Not the usual soppy love poem - it rocks Brian, it has heart and intellect and a deeply forlorn element...

excellent writing...

  K

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Jannel
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4 posted 12-30-2000 09:55 PM       View Profile for Jannel   Email Jannel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jannel

that was beautiful. reminds me of plato's myth of the androgynous.
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The Shores of Alone


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I have to agree with the previous comments. This ROCKS
Happy New Year
Sandra
brian madden
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6 posted 01-01-2001 04:30 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

Ginners, I believe, corny as it may sound, that we are part of the heavens and the stars, and also that there are souls that we have very strong connections with. Thanks for your very kind reply

HiddenSparklez, love can be an intense emotion, thank you for your reply.

K, I don't go for soppy love poems, you should know me better than that lol and you know how "deeply forlorn" I am. Thanksfor very generous words.

Jannel, I am not familar with that Plato myth, so I will take your word for it. THanks for reading and replying.

Sandra, thanks and happy new year to you too.    




It's in your eyes a fire that's wild and glorious
Unhibited, unfinished in everything I do Let the morning rise like our hearts desire" whipping boy
JamesMichael
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7 posted 01-01-2001 04:54 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

"In this life wait for me,  I will be with you shortly."  Enjoyed reading this Brian...James
poutprincess
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8 posted 01-05-2001 01:41 AM       View Profile for poutprincess   Email poutprincess   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poutprincess

i finally found it, and i have to say this is breathtaking brian..........im at a loss for words about how this poem makes me feel.
you always have just the right thing to say and you always say it in such a creative and beautiful way.
~Dawn

"Like a soul without a mind, in a body without a heart, Im missing every part." Unfinished Sympathy-Massive Attack
brian madden
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9 posted 01-05-2001 02:59 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

James, thanks.

Dawn, well I will hopefully have more words for you at the weekend. I will just say a simple thank you and send my love here, and save the more passionate thanks for when we are alone.  

It's in your eyes a fire that's wild and glorious
Unhibited, unfinished in everything I do Let the morning rise like our hearts desire" whipping boy
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