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*prevailing*darkness*
Junior Member
since 2000-12-18
Posts 36
Port Richey, FL

0 posted 2000-12-28 11:37 AM


[profanity edited]
Dedicated to my father
or lack thereof

When you speak to me,
I know your intentions are good
but your words fall
like drops of alcohol
upon an open wound
burning into my flesh
and slowly melting me away
from the innermost part
of my soul outwards
leaving me hollow and empty inside.
I am constantly amazed
at how you say you love me
and yet your actions
betray your words.
You have robbed me
of my innocence
and made me stand before you
trembling, naked, and bleeding
completely exposed to you,
but somehow you cannot see
the decay you have caused.
I let a part of me open
and you have crept inside
only to consume me
and silently witness my death.
All I ever wanted
was to make you proud
and it's obvious
as I sit here writing
that I have failed
horribly.
What society would call
a fatherless child
~ [profanity edited]~
the word haunts me
and chills me to the bone.
And there you stand
in all of your glory
oblivious to the fact
that I am slowly dying
and it is because
of you.

Hey there PD - I edited out the profanity in your poem as it goes against the guidelines.

Thankyou

Severn

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*Always do right. This will gratify some people and astonish the rest.*



[This message has been edited by Severn (edited 12-28-2000).]

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Dark_kisses_Within
Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680
Kansas
1 posted 2000-12-28 12:13 PM


Holy! Wow! I am kinda speechless here! And trust me that doesnt happen often   I am sorry of the pain you go through.  When something scars your life it is difficult to get past it.  I hope writing helps you bare the painful imagery.

Peace,
Mags


No person is worth your tears, and the only one that is ...... will never make you cry


*prevailing*darkness*
Junior Member
since 2000-12-18
Posts 36
Port Richey, FL
2 posted 2000-12-28 03:58 PM


Dark_Kisses,
thank you! I'm sorry, but I had to kind of chuckle at your response... I wrote this last night while smoking a cigarette and just thinking. I decided that I had better grab a pen and write it down, and you've made me glad I did. Writing always helps to heal the pain, or temporarily subdue it. Thanks again!  

*Always do right. This will gratify some people and astonish the rest.*

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