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Lace and Black Curtains

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Swamp了aeryie
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since 12-04-2000
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fairyland....of course;)


0 posted 12-24-2000 12:36 AM       View Profile for Swamp了aeryie   Email Swamp了aeryie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Swamp了aeryie

She never liked the color blue,
she had black curtains in her parlor,
said they kept out the red lights that line the street
and other lights,she didn't care to see.

Joy was her name
and wasn't that a shame?
Because she had all kinds of demons to spew,
ignoring situations pretending she never knew.
Dark secrets in her very heart,
keeping them was her work of art.

Well those black curtains kept out many things but the worst was inside,
not outside the lace windows.
Joy should have tacked dark curtains over her china cabinet.

That's where the evil was trapped,
came in through the back boards that gapped.
Underneath the glaze of those shiney chiney plates,
that's where little children were imprisoned by the fates.
Golden strings spun out and smiling faces painted on.
Whatever happened to the little boy Shawn?
Joy cooked them dinners set out on fine currier and ives
with best silver forks and shiniest knives.
The knaves ate first and belched and fell with their faces into the jelly.
They were so well behaved and such good men who did whatever it was they wished.
And the ladies of the card court watched with one eye turned away,
as they raped the daughters and layed down the sons with sweet words.

Joy,though,watched with two eyes,
and somehow told herself lies
about the way it was and shoudn't be,
a lace cuffed lady were she.
Perhaps black curtains were hung in her head,
perhaps the black curtain were books she read.
Sitting in her rocking chair,
pretending nothing wrong was there.
Hauling water,peeling toes,
picking ripe children that grows in rows.
And she never minded doors that creak and swing slow.
Or rusted trucks and cars that fill the yard.
Nevermind two alone,or even two apart.
All was perfect in the world of Joy.
Joy was a strange woman......


"All art is an expression of pain."~John Lennon
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Swamp了aeryie
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since 12-04-2000
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fairyland....of course;)


1 posted 12-24-2000 12:45 AM       View Profile for Swamp了aeryie   Email Swamp了aeryie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Swamp了aeryie

For the curious few....I don't expect anyone to get much out of this,for most of the symbolism is on a personal level more or less a poem i wrote for only me to understand,but Joy was my Grandmother,actually her name was Ruby,but she was always pretending all was swell and things like sex and depression don't exist.So i decided to call her dear "Joy".Ruby was a very bad woman,in a very sweet way. My family on that side is the type where the men get away with murder and rape and the women's job is to pretend she see's nothing and knows nothing.I was a victim of her ignorance and now i'm finally after many years deciding it's fine to be mad at her for what she was and what she did *please applaud!!*  
Ginners
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since 07-22-2000
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Mullica Hill, New Jersey


2 posted 12-24-2000 12:50 AM       View Profile for Ginners   Email Ginners   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ginners

You are right, i don't understnad, but it is good to write for yourself sometimes.  parts of this poem reminded me Alice in Wonderland and Through the Looking Glass, i'm not sure why, bu tthat is what i pictured.  i did like it even if i didnt understand.  I hope all is well in your life now and you are able to deal with what happened with "Joy" or Ruby, good luck

"I'll build a wall if we can keep them on the other side"---NIN
"There is no always forever, just this"-the cure
Dark_kisses_Within
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since 03-21-2000
Posts 678
Kansas


3 posted 12-24-2000 01:20 AM       View Profile for Dark_kisses_Within   Email Dark_kisses_Within   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Dark_kisses_Within's Home Page   View IP for Dark_kisses_Within

I *applaud* you.  Great work of inner piece! I hope all is well with you now.  

Mags


No person is worth your tears, and the only one that is ...... will never make you cry

Swamp了aeryie
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fairyland....of course;)


4 posted 12-26-2000 12:47 AM       View Profile for Swamp了aeryie   Email Swamp了aeryie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Swamp了aeryie

Thank you Dark Kisses and Ginners =-] Btw Ginners Lewis Carroll is one of my favorite authors,although i didn't really have him in mind while writing this.

swampie


"All art is an expression of pain."~John Lennon
Professor Gloom
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since 07-23-2000
Posts 3074
of Depression


5 posted 12-27-2000 05:24 AM       View Profile for Professor Gloom   Email Professor Gloom   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Professor Gloom's Home Page   View IP for Professor Gloom


Swamp#Faeryie,
Pardon me if I dont Applaud,
Whereas I think this is a very good rough draft,
I would suggest you rewrite it.

You start off very well,
By your first stanza of you show your poem isnt going to be
Strictly governed by rhyme, and the second stanza is good,
After that I believe is where you let emotion
Overrule your writing of poetry.
At the end your writing skills retake control from emotion,
And you finish well.

Even as a draft, it was Joyful read.

Gloom
Severn
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6 posted 12-27-2000 07:39 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Inner release is so important...and metaphors often work so well - they don't take you too close - keeps a safe distance from the pain sometimes hey?

Smiles from a fellow life-confronter

K
Jannel
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since 01-18-2000
Posts 498
Muncie, IN, USA


7 posted 12-27-2000 09:49 PM       View Profile for Jannel   Email Jannel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jannel

even witha sad inspiration, this was a wonderfully told story. i liked the children in plates idea. it was interesting. and the black lace curtains were a nice touch as well.
Swamp了aeryie
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fairyland....of course;)


8 posted 12-29-2000 11:30 PM       View Profile for Swamp了aeryie   Email Swamp了aeryie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Swamp了aeryie

Well thank you one and all,i didn't expect this poem to get as much attention as it did.
And by the by Prof. Gloom,you are quite right!! I know little to nothing about the technicalities (heck i can't even spell) of poetry. I need to visit the work shop and get a little know how,all my stuff just comes off the sleeve,no method to my madness,i will certainly take your suggestion =]

swamp faeryie


"All art is an expression of pain."~John Lennon
JamesMichael
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since 11-16-1999
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA


9 posted 01-01-2001 04:52 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Interesting to read...James
qtpieelmo
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since 07-04-2000
Posts 1008
Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY


10 posted 01-01-2001 05:54 PM       View Profile for qtpieelmo   Email qtpieelmo   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for qtpieelmo

yes, this was an interesting one- although it is strange. poetry is suppose to be personal though & some is not meant for everybody to understand--poetry is therapy--well it is for me at least--great work   LOVE ELMO <3
Swamp了aeryie
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fairyland....of course;)


11 posted 01-02-2001 08:55 PM       View Profile for Swamp了aeryie   Email Swamp了aeryie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Swamp了aeryie

thanks james and elmo =]

"All art is an expression of pain."~John Lennon
Songbird
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since 12-15-1999
Posts 2211
California


12 posted 02-16-2001 08:09 PM       View Profile for Songbird   Email Songbird   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Songbird's Home Page   View IP for Songbird

I really like the way you expressed yourself here. It tells a very interesting story, giving different perspectives on a situation. There are all too often people who live in a state of denial while the innocent suffer.
 
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