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Professor Gloom
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0 posted 2000-12-01 05:17 AM


Death will come some time too cold,
Slaying me some winter night,
I’ll slip between dark and light,
Death will not harvest my soul,

Dark and Light,
I pace the space of between,
Just a soul,
Always cold,
I see not be, stay unseen,
Dark and Light.

I watch the ones still living,
Roaming unnoticed and free,
Witnessing things I can’t be,
From this place unrelenting

Gloom


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nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
1 posted 2000-12-01 11:06 AM


Living Still

Life will rise and play a part,
Reigning warmth upon my cold,
Into the arms, I'll slip to hold
Softness resting 'gainst my heart.

Warm to hold,
My goal to reach the in-between.
Free of heart,
Filled in part,
Disguised the feel, mine, sateen
Warm to hold.

I draw you to me, death,
Staving you off, with a sigh.
Each move, a step, 'nother bye
Life, "living still", with each breath.

~Wynter
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"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II




[This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (edited 12-01-2000).]

Xeonox
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2 posted 2000-12-01 11:22 AM


Great work. I enjoyed it.



Ronil (The sweet sound of summer sends serenity through my soul searching for that evermore solitude.)



Verve
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3 posted 2000-12-01 11:48 AM



I love dark poetry ... This was really well done.

~verve

fractal007
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4 posted 2000-12-01 05:44 PM


Cool poem.  I like your second line:

Slaying me some winter night,

That's a good one.  Good imagery that compliments the theme.

Professor Gloom
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5 posted 2000-12-02 10:45 PM


Thank you, nakdthoughts,
Your poetic responds in kind,
Was a wonderful counter piece to mine.

Thank you, Xeonox,
Glad you took the time to read and respond.

Thank you, Verve,
Glad you enjoyed.

Thank you, Fractal007,
Glad my image could please you,
To make one think is one of the goals of poetry,

Gloom

Suzanne Arlene
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6 posted 2000-12-03 08:02 AM


I enjoyed that poem  . It is very deep thoughts . WOW
Suzanne

Professor Gloom
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7 posted 2000-12-04 05:17 AM


Thank you, Susanne Arlene,
Glad you liked my dark deepness,
And pleased you took the time to respond.

Gloom

dragonpoe
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since 2000-11-12
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8 posted 2000-12-04 11:17 AM


Love the poem, and Wynter's counter response.
Of yours, Prof. Gloom, I saw the freedom of death, how it can be the final cut to all restraining strings. I  like that image, when I think of death, and yours painted that image clear.


With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free..
dragonpoe

Professor Gloom
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9 posted 2000-12-04 04:28 PM



Thank you, Dragonpoe
I am glad you liked my words,
Death is a frequent topic of mine
And I can hope that it will be freeing.

Gloom

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