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Victoria
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0 posted 2000-11-28 04:39 PM


You are my raven in the shadows
the stars that set me aflame
you are the wind in my hair
your voice ..i cannot tame

you are my.. dark angel
whispering of lust
my shadow in the moonlight
within you i trust

my blood flows
through warm veins
once of cold ice
my raven.. it is you
my arms of the night

in the shadows of dreams
and passion of abyss
i hear you call my name
and i long for your kiss

blood roses and thorns
within my black leather vase
come to me my raven
to my bed of crimson lace

let me share my passion
my lipstick upon your face
let me share my love
as our limbs doth embrace

in the shaft of the moonlight
i see you appear
Mmmmm
it is you ....my raven
you are finally here




A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)


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Ginners
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1 posted 2000-11-28 05:04 PM


This is very good and it made a picture in my mind of a shaft of moonlight my rave once appeared in, good work
JamesMichael
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2 posted 2000-11-28 05:09 PM


Very enticing...James
Victoria
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3 posted 2000-11-28 09:37 PM


Thank you Ginners and James..and for peeking in today..

                            ~Victoria~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)


nakdthoughts
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4 posted 2000-11-30 08:22 AM


I always loved this one..especially in voice...darn my mind has lost me and I can't think of the word instead..you know though I  mean on your site...lol   **tired** tired** tired, I am..,wonder why?

~Wynter


"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II



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5 posted 2000-11-30 11:14 AM


yes the audio...thanks hon...yes vegas will do that to you..im still tired too.its always fun though...as long as we are winning haa...

A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)


firecrakker
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6 posted 2000-11-30 11:32 AM


Nice one!!!!!    I enjoyed the visuals this poem brought!

Sheila

Verve
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7 posted 2000-11-30 01:53 PM



Great work ... I was totally lost in the beauty of the imagery ...


~verve

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8 posted 2000-11-30 04:01 PM


thank you Sheila and Verve..so glad you liked..nice to hear from you both..

                  ~Victoria~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)


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9 posted 2000-12-01 09:03 PM


Oh my, see what happens when I am gone for awhile? Whew, this is some awesome piece of writing. Steamy, with great images. And the feeling is so vivid.
Sandra

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10 posted 2000-12-02 01:21 PM


thanks hon..welcome back..missed you..your replys inspire to keep writing..

                     ~Victoria~

A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)


Kethry
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11 posted 2000-12-02 07:33 PM


Victoria,
I know a raven like that. A bringer of good luck perhaps.
Write on
Kethry


Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant - Thoreau



Hardrock
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12 posted 2000-12-02 07:52 PM


Darkly passionate, mysterious....all the good ingredients, blended so well. Good show, V.  Hardrock
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13 posted 2000-12-03 02:12 AM


Kethry..thank you and i always do write on haa...appreciate your comments..

Hardrock..always nice when you whisper from the shadows..

               ~Victoria~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)


taramw
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14 posted 2000-12-03 08:25 AM


Wow! One word... tremendous!  

"A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish


Victoria
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15 posted 2000-12-03 05:54 PM


thank you tara...nice to hear from you..glad you enjoyed..

                     ~Victoria~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)


Scarlet Lady
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16 posted 2000-12-03 08:23 PM


Ahhhhh yes!  Wonderfully imaginative and full of fire!  A piece of poetry that makes you feel it!  I loved it.....great job!
Victoria
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17 posted 2000-12-04 05:26 PM


thank you for your kind words..and for taking time to read..

                     ~Victoria~

                


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)


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