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Bleak House
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Bleak House |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia 
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Bleak house is where I live Bleak thoughts are what I give Bleak deeds with passing days Save me from infernal ways. Can you see me? Bleak as I am Blending in like bread, no butter just jam Bleak ideas spread through the universe Bleak existence I have, for I'm cursed To roam this life in the half real and half not To pass on this bleakness, to each every spot Where happiness reigns and loving abounds Deny me my sorrow, I'll give chase like hounds. I draw together the defeated, depressed Lost souls wandering finding no rest I draw them in to my world with no hues Yet still I'm lonely, weary confused. As bleakness spreads so does my sorrow That I should cause no hope for the morrow I stand here on the abyss with regret If I take my life can you forget And survive…… Why do yesterdays remain and todays pass by ...unnoticed? Rex E. Alford |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
Kethry...Something keeps bringing me back to this poem. There is a "grayness" here...a feeling of "lostness" in the words. I think you have done exceptionally well, even to the title, in describing feelings that overtake us all from time to time. Well done. Hardrock |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Hardrock, It was written at a grey life time, Thanks for the response Be well Kethry Why do yesterdays remain and todays pass by ...unnoticed? Rex E. Alford |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
whoa! I loved this one! I too have felt this way. Very bleak, indeed. |
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firecrakker Member
since 2000-10-20
Posts 235Virginia |
I, too, enjoyed this piece.. Funny how the grey days are such an excellent outlet for prose. Thank you for sharing this..I look forward to reading more (although, I hope there is some sunshine around the corner..Good prose is no excuse for a bleak existence..  )Great write, Sheila |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
This a hauntingly dark piece Kethry. Take care! "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Like this very much, Especially the repetition at the front of the lines Sets the poem along it way. Down the bleak and darkness of passions, Very enjoyable. Gloom |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
fractal007, thanks firecrakker thanks for the response EagleOne, I will try Gloom Thanks for the critique. Be well Kethry Why do yesterdays remain and todays pass by ...unnoticed? Rex E. Alford |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
Kethry... this poem really appealed to me. Love the way you wrote this Take care.~ Tara ~ "A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Thanks Tara, I will, take care. Be well Kethry Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant - Thoreau |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
once again today you have put words to my feelings....enjoyed this poem so much.. hopefully, things wont always be bleak for me or for you...then again..sometimes grey is more comfortable than any other state of mind. wonderful job ~Dawn "Steady as it comes, right down to you, I've said it all, so maybe we're a Bliss of another kind" Bliss-Tori Amos |
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