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PureM
Junior Member
since 2000-11-23
Posts 22
London, UK

0 posted 2000-11-23 03:16 PM



*When I look into your eyes,
emotions rise,
my heart flies,
i find surprise...

~feel feelings I can't disguise~

...When I look into your eyes*

M


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taramw
Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738

1 posted 2000-11-23 04:22 PM


A big welcome to Dark Passions!  

I love this!    Short, sweet - and says oh so much! Beautiful...  

~ Tara ~


"A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish

fractal007
Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958

2 posted 2000-11-23 05:30 PM


Again, welcome.  What a debut you've made!  Good work on the rhyming.  Keeps the reader always focused on the subject of the eyes, through the 'ise' sound at the end of each line.  Good work.
EagleOne
Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...
3 posted 2000-11-24 02:14 AM


I agree, a great entrance! welcome!

"The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest"
~ My Angel.


firecrakker
Member
since 2000-10-20
Posts 235
Virginia
4 posted 2000-11-24 06:51 AM


Welcome to dark passions! You've done very well so far  ! Look forward to reading more.

Sheila

Dark_kisses_Within
Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680
Kansas
5 posted 2000-11-24 11:35 AM


Welcome to Dark Passions!!  This one was short YET so to the point!  Great work!  

DkW


No person is worth your tears, and the only one that is ...... will never make you cry


PureM
Junior Member
since 2000-11-23
Posts 22
London, UK
6 posted 2000-11-24 12:15 PM


Thanks everyone for making me feel welcome!  I don't write very often and I feel I have much to learn about this wonderful way of expression... but when I do write it is always what is in my heart.

Thanks again Tara, EagleOne, Fractal, Sheila & DkW!

Take care, and I'm really enjoying reading everyone else's poems.
Mat

[This message has been edited by PureM (edited 11-24-2000).]

Tiersdin
Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364
east coast
7 posted 2000-11-24 12:17 PM


Loads of passion in a few short lines, enjoyed reading this...

*smiles*
-Tier

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