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JOY 14
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since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA

0 posted 2000-11-22 03:21 PM


IF YOU SCREAM
by Joy

If you scream
I will shout
If you leave
Then I'll storm out
If you cry
I'll comfort you
But if you die
I won't die too

I choose to live
I choose to be not
Exactly like you
It's about time
I stop living
Through someone elses eyes

If I scream
Will you shout?
If I leave
Will you storm out?
Do you have my ability
To take someone elses dreams
And make them your own?
If I die
Will you die too?
No,
No,
I didn't think so

~This sounds like a song in my head. Just imagine it to the tune of Kumbia(spelling?) my Lord with a lil twist~


© Copyright 2000 Kristen Joy Jacobus - All Rights Reserved
Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
1 posted 2000-11-22 08:08 PM


Yes yes!!  It fits to Kumbaya My Lord well done!!  
It is sad when they don't feel it to the depth you do, when the light isn't on for them.  I know how it feels and it sux!! LOL

Find one that does hon... *big hugs*
Isis

*I believe every time you put your words to paper, you change. Each feeling is set free, and you may follow.....*
~Isis~~Sovereign of the Spirit.

firecrakker
Member
since 2000-10-20
Posts 235
Virginia
2 posted 2000-11-22 09:14 PM


This is so true..and well thought out. It is so easy to try and live how someone else would want you to.. I'm glad you see the futility in it.. sad as it is.

Sheila

catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone
3 posted 2000-11-23 08:27 AM


Good job, Joy. I completely empathize. You are showing your strength here.
Sandra

fractal007
Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958

4 posted 2000-11-23 01:44 PM


An interesting tune to use for this poem, lol.  I enjoyed it.  The last four lines are pretty devastating, and drive home the essence of the problem.  You are right.  You should stop trying to live through someone else's eyes.  
JOY 14
Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA
5 posted 2000-11-23 06:22 PM


Thanks for the replies everyone. Have a happy Thanksgiving

Joy

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