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EagleOne
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since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...

0 posted 2000-11-22 07:13 AM


I hold you in my arms
Yet I feel the void grow
That empty space in your heart
Where I once dwelled
Though your flesh is warm
I feel only the chill of your disdain
Yes! Roll away, roll away and let me be
Let me drift back into the emptiness
That darkness that was once our love



"The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest"
~ My Angel.


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Severn
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since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

1 posted 2000-11-22 04:20 PM


Eagle One...your poem instantly grabbed me...
the second line in particular..
and then these:

I feel only the chill of your disdain
Yes! Roll away, roll away and let me be

excellent work, really well done - and it's a rare occasion to find a poem that 'speaks' to me so..

K

The wind shifts like this:
Like a human without illusions...
This is how the wind shifts:
Like a human, heavy and heavy,
Who does not care.

W.S

catalinamoon
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since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
2 posted 2000-11-22 04:29 PM


Feeling the cold chill right now. This is powerful. I hope you don't have to experience this for long.
Sandra

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
3 posted 2000-11-22 04:45 PM


Enjoyed reading this perspective of cold love...James
firecrakker
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since 2000-10-20
Posts 235
Virginia
4 posted 2000-11-22 09:23 PM


wow... great job! Not exactly a pleasant feeling, but you've captured it very well.. I enjoyed this read. It's not that great on the other side of the void, either...

Sheila

Victoria
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Posts 5869

5 posted 2000-11-22 10:13 PM


shadows of love trying to survive but caught within the cold chambers of the heart..yes you expressed it well Eddie..

             ~Victoria~




A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)


Tiersdin
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since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364
east coast
6 posted 2000-11-23 01:15 AM


very sad...

-Tier

Dream Chaser
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since 2000-11-21
Posts 32
South Carolina
7 posted 2000-11-23 01:48 PM


As I read your peom, it touched my heart...because it's very close to my relationship with my hubby right now.  

"That empty space in your heart
where I once dwelled
Though your flesh is warm
I feel only the chill of your disdain"

The title drew me in and I thought "he's writing about me."     I enjoyed it very much.  Thanks!

Angel

Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
Michigan
8 posted 2000-11-23 09:48 PM


Eagle...you leave me in awe of the depth of
emotion you can weave into so few words, it
is evident that you have found the peace and
healing within poetry..keep weaving and let
the sunshine in...Warm Angel Wing Hugs to
you my dear friend~


You cannot dance in the sun until you have cried in the rain~

EagleOne
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since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...
9 posted 2000-11-24 02:38 AM


Severn....it's an honour to know my words could "speak" to you, thanks!

Sandra......yeah! me too.   Take care!

James.....always enjoy reading your thoughts, thanks.

Sheila....you are so right, not pleasant for anyone! Thanks for adding your thoughts.

Victoria......"Shadows of love" Yes! that's it. Your comment is always appreciated, thanks!

Tier.....a sad situation all round!

Angel......My heart goes out to you knowing that you are living this experience, take care!

My butterfly, What can I say that hasn't already been said? Your friendship, faith, and support gives me the insperation to keep writing. And you know that writing does help with the healing.   Sunshine and smiles to you my friend!



"The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest"
~ My Angel.


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