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Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley

0 posted 2000-11-20 11:30 PM


From the time Robin was twelve or so
this masterpiece was his aim;
feathers collected and painted became
His hobby, his life, his game.

Only the white feathers he chose
from birds he never saw
he painted them colors of the sun
of the butterfly and macaw.

Glue held them to the wall of his room
brilliant blue and red and green
They shimmered in the evening light
in a room no one had seen.

He kept to himself since that terrible time
when his father called him that name
Hidden from the world he didn’t know
From unspoken shame.

His mother drank and left him alone
Teachers gave him up long ago
He spent his days painting his feathers
until he felt it was time to go.

He stood naked in front of the wall
and saw in the mirror reflected
a stunning sight, he told himself
someone who would never be rejected.

When the last feather dried and was glued in place
He gazed triumphantly at his feat
The colors bold and beautiful
made his next goal feel so sweet.

He removed his clothes and stood
before the painted bird
then hung himself with a nylon rope
before his mother heard.

They whispered for years about him
Fag, queer and worse
His mother burned the feathers
before his body left in the hearse.

The wind rustles now and then
blowing a feather free
and far away where the painted birds fly
Robin cries:
look at me! look at me!


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serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

1 posted 2000-11-21 01:02 AM


I feel like I know this little bird...this is sad but wonderful and poignant...

Big Hugs and a figure eight soar through the sky for you sharon....

EagleOne
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since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...
2 posted 2000-11-22 02:02 AM


Wow! This one really got to me, had to fight back a tear. It is just so sad.....

"The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest"
~ My Angel.


marcos
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since 2000-11-22
Posts 8

3 posted 2000-11-22 02:57 AM


this is so beautiful, i don't know what to say, its honestly, wow, i'm in shock..its amazing...I'm new here so i'm still figuring out how everything works, but i think you're poem, (if it isn't already) should definitely be on the main page, for more people to see...awesome


Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
4 posted 2000-11-22 08:08 AM


Thank you for your kind comments. I'm glad it touched you - I know it reflects my position and that is not shared by everyone. But that's ok. I may post it to the main site, not sure...but thanks for thinking it's worthy.  
Alicat
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since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094
Coastal Texas
5 posted 2000-11-22 10:04 PM


deVine one, it is indeed a rare pleasure to read your material in the Darkest of Passionate Forums. This one struck a definate chord which still rings true despite the neglect, dust and rust clinging tenaciously to my inner strand of stretched wire.
Hardrock
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
6 posted 2000-11-23 03:51 PM


PDV...I know when I click on one of your poems that I will NEVER be disappointed.  But this one....it's just beyond any words I could find to describe it.  Stunning!!!  Hardrock
fractal007
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since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958

7 posted 2000-11-23 05:51 PM


Whoa!!!!  This is probably THE most impressive poem I have ever read in a LONG time!  It touched me particularly because I live in a place where there is much alchohol and substance abuse.  As a result, there are unwanted children everywhere.  On the surface, they are awful creatures, breaking windows, beating innocent people up.  But underneith, they are just like the boy in your poem.  

You should really get this published!  Thank you for sharing.

firecrakker
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since 2000-10-20
Posts 235
Virginia
8 posted 2000-11-24 06:43 AM


This was a very wonderful surprise to read. The title drew me right in.. and the poem kept me glued to my seat. Great writing, friend.

Sheila

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