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Michael
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0 posted 2000-11-18 11:56 PM


BROTHER MINE

Oh, brother of the Darkling Clan,
What voice hears ye this night?
Wouldst thou yet smile upon this man?
Deny this beggar’s plight?

What angels, few and far between,
Before thy whims have fell?
That all must come to prance and preen
This dichotomy of hell.

What stars yet shine upon the sky?
As blue cascades to black,
And vision falls upon the lie
Thy facades shan’t hold back.

What insurrectionist reply
Might kiss thy poisoned lips?
To, for now, for-never deny
Touch of thy fingertips.

Wouldst thou yet dare to call me friend?
Thy knife still wet with glee…
To see but yet another end
To endless misery.

Oh, brother of the Darkling Clan,
Steady, this voice entails.
For I, my friend, am just a man
Death readily avails.


Michael



But dreams of those who dream as I,
Aspiringly, are damned and die.


EAP

© Copyright 2000 Michael Anderson - All Rights Reserved
taramw
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 738

1 posted 2000-11-19 01:11 AM


This is fantastic Michael!    Thoroughly enjoyed reading... skipped along very nicely.
~ Tara ~


"A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish

fractal007
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since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958

2 posted 2000-11-19 04:05 AM


Whoa!  Michael, you have a TALENT!  I've never been able to write in iamb, let alone any other type of beat.  The content was also really good.  Great imagery!
Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley
3 posted 2000-11-19 11:25 AM


You are a magnificent poet...glad you are sharing your talent with all the newbies here!!!    
Tiersdin
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since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364
east coast
4 posted 2000-11-19 01:31 PM


*applauds*

well done!

-Tier

Michael
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5 posted 2000-11-19 08:59 PM


taramw, glad you enjoyed it so...

fractal007, content has always been far more important than form in my eyes... I would gladly sacrifice meter to exemplify emotion any day of the week.  True poetry holds beauty in any form, my friend...

Sharon, Dark poetry has always been my forte', you know that.  I miss this forum, and all it once meant to me.  I hope to be spending alot more time here and making many more friends amongst the "newbies" too.  

Tiersdin, Thank you very much...

...and thank you all for the kind replies.


Michael


OLIAS
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since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090
Pearl city Iowa
6 posted 2000-11-19 10:50 PM


I loved the use of old world language, it adds to the impact, but what I especially like is the unusual rhyme, no cliched "love" and "dove" here, (not that thee is anything wrong with that), you have a talent sir and I enjoyed this piece very much.

Regards
Olias

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

7 posted 2000-11-20 05:53 AM


I love the language you use---I wish I knew how to do this--

gotta say it-incredible, michael!!!

darklings...yeah. "dichotomy of hell"...

grinning over here...love this!!!!


baerlon
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since 2000-01-14
Posts 197
Youngstown and East Liverpool, Ohio, USA
8 posted 2000-11-21 03:33 AM


I don't know why but this whole poem made me want to say "et tu Brutus"  I very much enjoyed the pictures you painted in this one.

There's a peace inside us all
Let it be your friend
It will help you carry on
In the end
There's a peace inside us all
-Creed

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