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meara
Junior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 15


0 posted 2000-11-16 10:54 PM


Depression
Dark, overbearing
Numbing pain, Dancing love
Caring, feeling
Safe and bright
Passion



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OLIAS
Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090
Pearl city Iowa
1 posted 2000-11-17 11:05 PM


We all need that light and passion in our lives, and I find it here, great poem!!

Take care,
Olias.

Severn
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

2 posted 2000-11-18 05:19 AM


Interesting transition you have here...

I like the movement you achieved through such a short piece..

K

The wind shifts like this:
Like a human without illusions...
This is how the wind shifts:
Like a human, heavy and heavy,
Who does not care.

W.S

fractal007
Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958

3 posted 2000-11-22 01:33 PM


This one is cool!  I like how you've managed to transform something so dark into something so much brighter.
JOY 14
Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA
4 posted 2000-11-22 03:27 PM


Meara,
Okay, here's what I got from this poem.
This is the way I feel. There's this depression and its berring down but theres always hope out there dancing like a faraway star that you can't reach, and that's fustrating, but still creates that thing to reach for, that hope.
Great work. You really conved the message in only a few lines.

Joy

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