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serenity blaze
Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738


0 posted 2000-11-16 06:03 AM


You want the dark?
you yearn, the shadow?
a touch of sacred
made, unhallowed?
Want me?
serpentine
within?
(whisper)
want me
(whisper)
sin...

taste me...
(own me...)
waste me...
(lonely...)
like an orphan--
take me in...

taste me...
(own me...)
wasted....
lonely?
lonliness
my only sin...

an ache of thighs
and wonder whys,
and every wonder
cries within...
simple sighs
the taste of lies--
growing fonder,
loving him...




[This message has been edited by serenity (edited 11-16-2000).]

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dragonpoe
Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608
Palm Bay, Florida
1 posted 2000-11-16 10:18 AM


"and every wonder
cries within...
simple sighs
the taste of lies--"  <- absolutely love these lines!

This has a good quality to be put to an alternative sounding music, sung the same, with a dark music to accompany it.


With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free..
dragonpoe

firecrakker
Member
since 2000-10-20
Posts 235
Virginia
2 posted 2000-11-16 11:02 AM


a pondering, awe-struck, "wow"..is all I can say to this. So few words that describe so much passion and yearning. I really liked this!

Sheila

Dark_kisses_Within
Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680
Kansas
3 posted 2000-11-16 12:01 PM


Yes WOW!   This flowed so smoothly.  It was so beautiful to read just for the way it all went together.  Great work, my Friend.

DkW


No person is worth your tears, and the only one that is ...... will never make you cry


LM
Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585

4 posted 2000-11-17 10:22 AM


Cool... it's really good, like a tune playing in my head. Enjoyed it a lot!
Take Care!

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