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nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

0 posted 2000-11-12 07:14 AM

You Never Words

some days i feel  very small
the "you never" words
come reigning down
u
p
o
n
me

flooding my once open  h  e  a  r   t
with feelings of
"what can I say now
to make you hurt
as much as I do..."

as the pace quickens
"get even thoughts",
begin to fill those open spaces
immersing my heart in negativity
fingering every word
that beats in my mind,
until i am vined in tendrils that are
squeezing out of  >>>>ME<<<<
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                               e.
                               .
                              .
                               .
                           ~Wynter

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"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

[This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (edited 11-12-2000).]

SpitFire
Member Elite

since 2000-04-19

Posts 2396

1 posted 2000-11-12 02:17 PM

~WoW! What a display,...what an expression. Moving! *Peace.

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

2 posted 2000-11-12 02:24 PM

Awesome, Wynter. Stunning, really.
Sandra

silentsky
Member

since 2000-08-09

Posts 114

3 posted 2000-11-12 03:18 PM

i really like this. its really creative and has a very moving effect,
flooding my once heart.
shira

dragonpoe
Senior Member

since 2000-11-12

Posts 608
Palm Bay, Florida

4 posted 2000-11-12 03:53 PM

Wow! This is a fantastic piece, not just for the poetry, which is well written, but for the visual effects you gave it. To me that says that not only did you feel this piece, you also saw those emotions, and that gives this more power.
Enjoyed this very much, though it saddened my heart to feel the emotions within it.

Dopey Dope

Moderator

Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2000-11-12 05:04 PM

Hey this was sooooooooo great! I loved the ending. It made this huge impact on me.
Wonderful!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

6 posted 2000-11-12 05:19 PM

Spitfire- the way I felt this morning ...well I could have flattened a car with a mallot..and that was before the day got even worse.

Sandra- I feel like you have in some of your past poems grrrrrrrrr

shira- such a beautiful name...almost like saying glad you are shira-ing with us ...just teasing, thank you for responding

dragonpoe- I feel like I am draggin' after this rough day...

D_D- hey there...one of my poet friends is in your neck of the woods  somewhere for a while...hey where is your neck anyway?  kidding..good to see you J..I knew you would show up for my moody ones.

Thank you All...if I don't respond to your poems for this day..it is because I am battling here and it's quite hard to go from  being upset to reading and responding and making any sense. huggzz to you all

~Wynter

** by the way it took me over an hour, dp before I could get that  spiraling effect  to work out *s

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

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