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Jonas
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since 2000-03-03
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0 posted 2000-11-10 10:44 AM



The flowers died,
their faded red petals and dried stems
whisked away by the winter winds
to an unknown destination;
perhaps the same purgatory
that claims the souls of the lonely.

11/9/00


© Copyright 2000 Gary - All Rights Reserved
firecrakker
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since 2000-10-20
Posts 235
Virginia
1 posted 2000-11-10 04:11 PM


Great comparison. I enjoy reading your work.. it makes me think. I look forward to reading more.

Sheila

Jonas
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2 posted 2000-11-10 05:15 PM


Thank you firecrakker  
taramw
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3 posted 2000-11-11 04:22 AM


I like the analogy  
~ Tara ~

"A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish

Verve
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since 1999-06-23
Posts 348
Singapore
4 posted 2000-11-12 02:27 AM



Yup i have to agree ... This is a good analogy.

~Verve

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5 posted 2000-11-12 05:06 PM


Great analogy.....i loved this!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!


Jonas
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6 posted 2000-11-13 01:43 PM


Thank you everyone  
Jannel
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 492
Muncie, IN, USA
7 posted 2000-11-13 03:24 PM


veery nice. today is the first truly cold day of the season here, and it really seemed to fit my mood.

jann elizabeth

If you can feel that staying human is worthwhile, even when it can't have any result whatever, you've beaten them.
-1984


Severn
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
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8 posted 2000-11-13 04:54 PM


Nice metaphor...

I like how you have given a sense of originality...

sometimes short pieces say it all...

good write

K

The wind shifts like this:
Like a human without illusions...
This is how the wind shifts:
Like a human, heavy and heavy,
Who does not care.

W.S

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