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if I could Kill
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if I could Kill |
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Allstaria22 Member
since 2000-06-11
Posts 83MN USA |
alone once again overburdened with memories that night I was so young so innocent all I wanted from life was happiness and joy all I wanted from you was a friend but you took away my hope you took away my joy now all I do is fear and hate I cry for who I was I cry for who I am if I could tear you from my soul I would but you take your hold on me so strong after all these years you're not even here and yet I feel you next to me haunting me no trust no love no dreams what would I do if I saw you again what would I say could I ever hurt you the way that you hurt me could I take from you anything that ment as much as what you took from me no I don't think I could you may have killed so much in side me but I refuse to let you kill what is good in me. [This message has been edited by Allstaria22 (edited 11-08-2000).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
A sad occurence in this poem, but I do love the attitude in this poem. You've become strong from whatever occured and it shows. I wish you the best of luck and if you do see him....stare him in the eyes and think how good of a person you are and how he'll never take that from you. Good job! adios!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
You have suffered much and the pain is felt here, but you have the strength not to bow to his deceit, and you have prevailed, and I believe you will go on, stronger and wiser. We all learn the hard way. i can relate to this. Ron Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox |
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SwEeTnSeXy18 Member
since 2000-09-18
Posts 247nc |
Allstaria22: This poem brought tears to my eyes it was so sad. Im so sorry you had to go throught pain like this espically from someone you thought you could trust. I wont say i can imagine how hard it is because i cant and that really bothers me when people say that and cant understand because they havent been through it. Good luck in the future by staying strong and if you do see him again hold you head high and be happy to be who you are. Take care. ~Lisa~  ~in order to gain, you have to lose~ |
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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
Very good! Powerful and packed with feeling. With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free.. dragonpoe |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
Well done....dragonpoe said the words for me. It's a bit trite, but that which doesn't kill you makes you stronger. Hardrock |
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MySisterMegan New Member
since 2000-11-10
Posts 8 |
Allstaria Well you are a bigger person than me, I personally would have to kill the slime. as to the poem... like. very sad and brave good luck to you MF 'In my eyes I see a blur of things that others see so clearly' |
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