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Dopey Dope
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0 posted 2000-11-06 01:46 AM


NOTE: Just for you to know. It's a lord talking to his kinsman....Each stanza is coming from a dif. person. First kinsman, then lord, then kinsman, then lord again.

Saving To Die:

Tis the hate O lord, that comsumes thy soul
Tis the ignorance of thee that betrays human whole
Tis the passion of thy heart that plunges thy mind
Yet in thy heart love you'll soon find.

O kinsman, O brother, your ways but amuse me
O kinsman, O brother it is the heart that kills thee
O kinsman, O brother,
Your life is but a game.
O kinsman, Or another,
It will never be the same.

O lord but thou hath no sense in reason
Tis spring, time of love, not a time of treason.
O lord if thou permit me, I must imply
That this thief,raper, killer is but a fly
Buzzing and bizzing among our food
Trying to but make us have a bad mood.

O kinsman, thou doth know logic of life
I will abide to thee to with hold my death knife.
Tis thee who hath love in this black hearted rat
So tis thee who will die, how about that?





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catalinamoon
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1 posted 2000-11-06 10:43 PM


Good stuff, DD, I like the atmosphere of it.
Sandra

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2 posted 2000-11-07 12:38 PM


this poem its pretty nice dopey like the way you used the medieval settings to incorporate the meaning of the poem good jod old friend.
Suzanne Arlene
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3 posted 2000-11-07 07:12 AM


now that is an interesting poem. Neat idea
good job. Suzanne

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4 posted 2000-11-07 08:19 AM


Dopey, this is interesting. And i mean that in a good way. It's really awesome, and I like it because it's different than what I've read today. I love you man!      

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Victoria
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5 posted 2000-11-07 01:06 PM


loved it DD..

                ~Victoria~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)


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6 posted 2000-11-08 02:58 PM


Yes interesting, but that word is always used with your poetry.  So I will say, um, finding a word, uh....intriguing.  Yeah, so, good job

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