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firecrakker
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0 posted 2000-11-03 03:46 PM


                Almost...

I almost lost my head...
   Discovering with my heart
I almost lost my mind..
   When love inevitably departs
I almost lost my eyes..
   blinded by reckless faith
I almost lost my ears...
   Listening to empty phrase
I almost lost my touch...
   Reaching for what wasn't mine
And I almost lost my soul..
      Existing for you and not I


Sheila  11-03-00  

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Allysa
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In an upside-down garden
1 posted 2000-11-03 03:52 PM


Wow. This is the first poem of yours I've read and I must say I am very impressed!!!!          

Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see.

JamesMichael
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2 posted 2000-11-03 04:49 PM


Nice expression and thank God it was only almost because thats better than losing..yes..James
Ron K. Fox
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3 posted 2000-11-03 10:36 PM


Almost missed this one...glad I didn't.nice read. has a flow to it. Glad it worked out. Almost

Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox


nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
4 posted 2000-11-03 11:32 PM


WOW...I almost missed this one too..very well written...this existing for others, can make one lose oneself...I now realize that and am trying to find myself again...I really did like the message in this, Sheila.


~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II



firecrakker
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5 posted 2000-11-03 11:48 PM


Thank you, all, for responding..and Wynter..it's true...If you lose yourself living for someone else.. you have nothing left to offer anyone. Good luck with your search..as with mine, its just beginning  

Sheila

Dark_kisses_Within
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Kansas
6 posted 2000-11-04 12:05 PM


WOW!!  Geesh this is so true , it hurts.  I once almost lost it all for someone else.  Then a good friend told me, to stop giving everything I had to ONE person.  To spread myself out to others.  Just incase that person leaves, ur world wont fall apart.  So I simply learned from that mistake and here I am.    
You did a great job describing this!
DkW


No person is worth your tears, and the only one that is ...... will never make you cry


Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration
7 posted 2000-11-04 12:32 PM


I almost passed this poem by. Glad I didn't!

Chris

catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone
8 posted 2000-11-04 08:56 PM


This is beautiful, glad I found it, too. You have a special heart.
Sandra

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9 posted 2000-11-05 01:40 AM


I loved this. It was great and very well thought of. GREAT JOB!



"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

taramw
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10 posted 2000-11-05 11:46 AM


Hmm... how true!  Nicely written  
~ Tara ~

"A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish

just_another_fe
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11 posted 2000-11-06 12:58 PM


good job i dont really know what to say on this 1. i felt it though thats for sure good job  
jwesley
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Spring, Texas
12 posted 2000-11-06 01:10 PM


Well done, and I agree...better almost than for sure.


jwesley

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