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Ron K. Fox
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since 2000-10-24
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0 posted 2000-11-03 11:58 AM


Don’t mind the smoke
A fire’s burning
Hold onto me
The world is turning

If you believe that tomorrow will be the same
Then tonight will be our chance to make it change

Don’t mind the wind
A storm is brewing
Getting lost within it
That's what we’re doing

If you’re looking away from the horizon
Then there’s nothing left to keep your eyes on

Don’t mind the waves
The sea is raging
Drown me again
I don’t need saving

If you're trying to close your mind just not to see
Then the smoke that I cause is just a screen

Don’t mind the smoke
A fire’s burning



[This message has been edited by Ron K. Fox (edited 11-03-2000).]

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nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29
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Between the Lines
1 posted 2000-11-03 03:01 PM


If you believe that tomorrow will be the same
Then tonight will be our chance to make it change


I needed that line to be placed in my thoughts...

an interesting format Ron. *s

~Wynter


"The worst prison would be a closed heart".

...Pope John Paul II


Ron K. Fox
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2 posted 2000-11-03 10:21 PM


Thanks Wynter...its all a matter of moving on...getting beyond the smoke screen so to speak...we put up our defenses...but behind them its a wild side waiting to be exposed

Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox


firecrakker
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Virginia
3 posted 2000-11-04 12:01 PM


Ron,

How true, how true... the truly fortunate ones get behind that smoke screen and discover the gift waiting for them. Just finding the trust to look past the smoke is the hard part.. Great poem!  

Sheila

Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration
4 posted 2000-11-04 12:39 PM


Very well done here Ron - Nice metaphor usage!

Chris

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The Shores of Alone
5 posted 2000-11-04 08:54 PM


Another one I understand too darn well, Ron. Great writing, as always.
Sandra

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6 posted 2000-11-05 01:04 AM


I liked the whole formatting and style of this poem. VEry well done and thought up. The message.......well the message was just a great. Great job Ron!



"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

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