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taramw
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 738


0 posted 2000-10-31 07:57 AM


by a thread
you keep me
hanging on.

like a spider
you weave
and spin
around me
tying me down.

entrapped
no longer wanting
or willing
to traverse
without you.

i become
the fly
within your
spiders
web.

~ Tara ~
31.10.00

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"A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish

[This message has been edited by taramw (edited 10-31-2000).]

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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration
1 posted 2000-10-31 12:47 PM


interesting that you swapped the metaphor mid-way: Cool tho - feels that way sometimes, eh?

Christopher

jwesley
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563
Spring, Texas
2 posted 2000-10-31 12:50 PM


I rather like it Tara.  Refreshing way to put it in perspective.  Nicely done.

jwesley

angelface
Junior Member
since 2000-10-25
Posts 40
Savannah area, Georgia
3 posted 2000-10-31 03:26 PM


I feel like that sometimes...nice metaphor  
Ron K. Fox
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since 2000-10-24
Posts 925

4 posted 2000-10-31 05:53 PM


you weave
and spin
around me
tying me down.

an overbearing relationship or just deceit...a few interpretations...very good


Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox

ilph
Member
since 2000-07-28
Posts 78

5 posted 2000-11-17 05:09 AM



tara

this is cool but i think you can fly out of there

josh

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