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If I Leave Here Tomarrow
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If I Leave Here Tomarrow |
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Jesse Jaymz Senior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 708Youngstown, ohio 
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hello yall this one might make you cry. a few nights ago me and my friends were driving down the roada nd we hit a slick spot and went onto a feild. no one was hurt, the car was perfect, just alittle scary. =) but on the way home i heard a song by lynyrd skynyrd called freebird. and for all of yall that dont know it the main line in the song is if i leave here tomarrow will you still remember me?? so that got me to thinking. and it inspired me to write this. no i am not suicidal =) just inspired. so here it goes. it goes out to my ex and her son. i love them very much. tell me what yall think. If I Leave Here Tomarrow If i leave here tomarrow will you still remember me? will you remember the love we had when our lives where careless and free like when we went to myrtle beach and walked together in the sand under the south carolina moonlight down the boardwalk, hand and hand If i leave here tomarrow will you still remember the day that just seeing your smile took my breath away like first time we kissed it sent shivers up my spine from that day forth my heart was no longer mine if i leave here tomarrow please never forget that you had my heart and soul since the day that we met i even gave you one thing i could never give to another i gave you my virginity something i could give no other if i leave here tomarrow i wouldnt want you to cry for i will always be in your heart i will always be by your side i know that you are married now i know we have had our fights but forever threw thick and thin i loved you with all my might if i leave here tomarrow if the sun goes down on me when i close my eyes your angelic face will be the last thing that i see you are the only one i know that could capture this outlaws heart so no matter what happens to me we will never be far apart if i leave here tomarrow and go to the heaven up above always remember wanda that you always were my one true love you gave me my dreamz you showed me the way you gave my life sunshine when all i saw was grey if i leave here tomarrow if my time on earth was threw my soul would go back home to dixie to be with david and you so if i leave here tomarrow just look out over the sea for i will always love you wanda and you will always be a part of me... Jesse C. Jaymz Once upon a time there was a light in my life, now theres only love in the dark, There's nothing I can do, a total eclipse of the heart. |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
Jesse... the words in this are just beautiful... yeah, sometimes I wonder... what would happen if I leave tomorrow?! But not this planet... just leave, if you know what I mean. Good heartfelt words here. take care!  ~ Tara ~ "A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
My outlaw brother, your heart is filled with a pain you dont deserve. Just by your words I see the soul of a good man. Though by twists of fate we endure heartaches on paths of loneliness, but we build bridges across streams of sorrow with the helping hands of friends to another love another paradise. hey pardner, your music is your soul, your heart, release the pain with it...it will free you...and don't you be leaving us tomorrow...I just got here. who the hell i'm a gonna write lyrics for? You all smile now, hear? Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Jesse, This is trully heart felt, and I sing a simular tune, went to try another and live a sour song. But I think we are all ment to sing a melody filled with love or we would not desire it so much, I know that you will sing again, and I also beleive we never forget our first love and there is nothing wrong with that. Peace be with you, beautiful writing here. Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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Jesse Jaymz Senior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 708Youngstown, ohio |
tara  hugs* thank you for your kind words. i was crying all the way threw writing this. makes ya ya wonder ya know?? thanks for the reply. ron: thank you so much my friend. i am a good man. to good at times. for if you get to know my you will learn that i would do anything for my friends. my heart is pure, yes it is true i have done alot of things that i regret in life but that dont make me a bad person. and if it wasnt for friends like yall who knows where i would be. thank you so much. and dont worry this outlaw is sticking around. Cerenity: thank you *hugs* i hope i can sing now. but alas my voice is filled with pain. will i ever forget her???? no, my heart wont let me. she wasnt my first love. but she was the one i love the most. she left foot prints on the beaches of my heart that will never wash away =( i just wish i would have never left virginia. thank you hun *hugs* Once upon a time there was a light in my life, now theres only love in the dark, There's nothing I can do, a total eclipse of the heart. |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Great Jesse..you have a great rhythm to your writing..love it.. very talented..~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
if i leave here tomorrow if the sun goes down on me when i close my eyes your angelic face will be the last thing that i see... So beautiful, jesse ..how anyone could resist your words is beyond me. ~Wynter Bliss "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
I'm with nakdthoughts here Jess she doesn't know what she missed, she is the fool in this scenario not YOU!!!!!! *hugs* beautiful work... Inspiration helps you write my brother... Isis *I believe every time you put your words to paper, you change. Each feeling is set free, and you may follow.....* ~Isis~~Sovereign of the Spirit. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Ah, Jesse, I know the feeling. For a day or two, I really thought, "what if I did walk into the ocean and never return, would he remember? Would he care?" But then I came to my senses, Ha! No man is worth that much of a sacrifice. No woman either. All broken hearts aside, this is always an interesting contemplation.. I think each poem you write here gets better and better. And, I am so glad you weren't hurt in the car incident. Luv ya Sandra |
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Jesse Jaymz Senior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 708Youngstown, ohio |
Victoria: thank you hun. i like my poems to rhyme and to have rythem. i have a dream of putting them to music one day. =) *hugs* thanks hun nakdthoughts: wynter bliss?? that is such a beautiful name. i dont know how she could resist. i wish i knew. i would give anything to be back in her arms in virginia. guess i will have to wait my turn huh?? thanks hun *hugs* e-mail me. sis: *hugs* thank you so much. i still feel like it was my fault. but i will feel that for a long time. i wish i could just go back home. *hugs* i was so nervous about posting this. i feared it would be to dark to post and get locked. glad it didnt. insperation does help me. love you sis. cat: *hugs* glad you care about me being hurt. *hugs* the accident was nothing. more of a laugh now but i am glad you care about little old me. thank you so much. and you even made me blush with that one comment about my poems. thank you. i know how you feel about wanting to walk into the ocean and not come back. i thought the same thing. is she worth it?? mabey. but my heart is being held up by many friends here and i could never do that. thank you cat. love yaOnce upon a time there was a light in my life, now theres only love in the dark, There's nothing I can do, a total eclipse of the heart. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Well chosen words Jesse...I've thought like this before...would I leave a good legacy...would someone sincerely miss me because I showed them love and understanding...James |
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Jesse Jaymz Senior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 708Youngstown, ohio |
james thank you. i wonder this alot. and by the response that i got here the resounding answer is yes. thank you all. in my time of need this place always makes me smile. thank you one and all. Once upon a time there was a light in my life, now theres only love in the dark, There's nothing I can do, a total eclipse of the heart. |
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LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
Hey Jess, this is so beautiful. I was thinking about it for so many times... if anything should happen (God forbid), how will people react? How will they remember me? Would they care ? If I get sick, how many would come visit me? Would HE come? Sometimes these thoughts dawn on me, maybe coz I've got no self esteem at all... Anyway, no matter what, I hope we'll get to see you here for a long long time, so don't go anywhere! Bye! "Most girls want a man with the mean green Don't wanna dance if he can't be Everything that I dream up A man that understands real love" |
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Jesse Jaymz Senior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 708Youngstown, ohio |
lm: *hugshugshugshugs* thank you hun. dont worry i aint going anywhere. mabey back to virginia if my dreamz come true again but thats about it. thank you so much. e-mail me sometime. owuld love to hear from you *hugs* love ya jesse Once upon a time there was a light in my life, now theres only love in the dark, There's nothing I can do, a total eclipse of the heart. |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Jese, Your writing is so beautiful Jesse. I hope one day you learn how to release all the pain that burdens you. You know I would miss you terrible if you left tomorrow.. so .. you best not go anywhere young man ~smile~ Big big hugs, Me |
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Jesse Jaymz Senior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 708Youngstown, ohio |
hun *hugs* thank you hun. you made me blush. dont worry i aint leaving. and if i do this outlaw is gonna put up a hell of a fight. i have gone through so much in my life that should have killed me and i am still here. so i am gonna be around a while. thank you so much hun *hugs* it means alot to me.love ya jesse Once upon a time there was a light in my life, now theres only love in the dark, There's nothing I can do, a total eclipse of the heart. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Jesse~ If I was to write a poem like this with so much pain I think I would go crazy. Knowing that I have so much inside of me that I dont want to get out. And am afraid to get out. I admire you for being able to do that. I am sorry that you have to go through so much pain. Its hard to let go of someone you love. And I feel for you. < !signature--> ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ [This message has been edited by ERIN (edited 11-11-2000).] |
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Jesse Jaymz Senior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 708Youngstown, ohio |
Erin *hugs* thank you for your comment. it has been very hard for me since i lost wanda. and i dont think i will ever get over her. i just wish i could be back in her arms. thank you hun love ya jesse Once upon a time there was a light in my life, now theres only love in the dark, There's nothing I can do, a total eclipse of the heart. |
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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
"if the sun goes down on me when i close my eyes your angelic face will be the last thing that i see" I love these lines Music is a wonderful tool for inspiration. PS Total Eclipse of the Heart is one of my ultimate favorite songs. |
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greentwin New Member
since 2000-11-09
Posts 4 |
Beautiful poem!!!! We are here such a short time your poem ask the questions that we hope our love one will answer they remember. |
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Jesse Jaymz Senior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 708Youngstown, ohio |
Dragonpoe: *hugs* finaly i found someone else that loves that song. it reminds me of me and here and what we have  thank you and i am glad you liked my work. greentwin: thank you. i wonder this question all the time. with all that has gone on in my life i know that one day i might not be here. and i just hope that she will remember me and love me like i love her. i am surprized about this poem. and that it has made a comeback. it was off the board and then came back. thank you yall.peace, love and rock n roll jesse Once upon a time there was a light in my life, now theres only love in the dark, There's nothing I can do, a total eclipse of the heart. |
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