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Lil OnE
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since 1999-12-14
Posts 234
Pasco County. Fl.

0 posted 2000-10-28 11:06 AM


My heart has been deceived
by the lies you fed my mind.
Yeah, you hid the truth,
but you didn't realize that I'd
figure it out in time.
How long did you think that you could fool me?
You know, I'm not as stupid as I may appear to be.
I trusted you, and was prepared to give you my heart...
you snatched it off of it's platter and ripped it all apart.
You, my friend, must have been confused.
You must have thought I needed you,
I'm not a person you can use.
I might be your friend, I'll smile and say "Hi."
But that's about it, as unimportant as a fly.
So don't say a word, please don't say one thing.
I don't need your truth
... or your lies.
I'm not sure what I was thinking...
daydreaming, I guess.
In a couple of days, I'll look back on this
and see it as a test.
A test of strength, a test of my mind.
I can't believe you hid the truth,
but I figured it out with time.



"No man is EVER worth my tears, and the only one who is will never make me cry"
~Lil OnE!~


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LM
Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585

1 posted 2000-10-28 01:05 PM


Wow... this is so true and sad, but with a good ending coz you know he's not worth your tears. It's hard to pass these tests but it's all worth it in the end!
Take Care!

"Most girls want a man with the mean green
Don't wanna dance if he can't be
Everything that I dream up
A man that understands real love"


Ron K. Fox
Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925

2 posted 2000-10-28 10:19 PM


and see it as a test.
A test of strength, a test of my mind.

glad you caught it in time...good for you, now  move on to greener pastures.

taramw
Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738

3 posted 2000-10-29 02:07 AM


Sad   But you wrote it well    Take care.
~ Tara ~

"A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish

Kethry
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
4 posted 2000-10-29 04:18 AM


LilOnE, such a strong poem and well written.
Thanks for posting it.
be well
Kethry


Growth demands a temporary surrender of security.
Gail Sheehy

firejerm
Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 217
Springfield, OH, good ol USA
5 posted 2000-10-30 12:46 PM


This must be the day for people to write similar poetry.  This appears more like a diary entry, I like this style.  Like you, I've given my heart away one too many times.  It's like riding a bike though, if you fall off, you get back on and do it again.  Good work.

Jeremy

"Those little slices of death, how I loathe them."
-Edgar Allen Poe

DJLI
Member
since 2000-06-21
Posts 237
TN, USA
6 posted 2000-10-30 11:38 PM


wonderfully written...I know just how these things go...keep your head up

P.L.U.R.

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