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Victoria
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0 posted 2000-10-25 05:23 PM


Can you feel me?
watching you in the night
watching your every move.
in the flame of moonlight

Can you smell the scent of love?
arousing the dark
Like a bloodhound
i know you crave me
only a raven embarks

mmmm..with delight
craving my flesh
as i stalk the night
in stockings of black mesh

Can you feel my breath?
whisper upon your neck
across your lips
across your mind
upon your ear lobe
oh sublime      

Can you taste sweet dew of twilight?
upon my lips of wine
you reach out for me
our shadows entwine

I know i can have you
walking in the night
walking all alone
in the flame of moonlight

Can you feel my heart beating?
beating upon your naked chest
beating as your body
presses  against my breast

Can you?.....Can you feel me?..
The way i feel you
in the darkness alone
Can you tell I want you?
before lips of our silhouettes
kisses softly..  Adieu


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A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)  





[This message has been edited by Victoria (edited 10-26-2000).]

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catalinamoon
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1 posted 2000-10-25 07:16 PM


Nice one, Victoria, very sensual. Rich and complex.
Sandra

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2 posted 2000-10-25 07:57 PM


Thank you for reading Sandra..nice to hear from you today hon..  

           ~Victoria~
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A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
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Suzanne Arlene
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3 posted 2000-10-25 09:51 PM


I am new here but your poems are so good.They stay with me long after i am done. I look forward to reading more .  Suzanne
Victoria
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4 posted 2000-10-25 11:22 PM


Thank you and welcome Suzanne..I appreciate your nice comments..  looking forward to reading yours..

                       ~Victoria~
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A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)  



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taramw
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5 posted 2000-10-26 06:49 AM


Lovely Victoria!    One of my favourites    Great ending... ~ Tara ~

"A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish

Severn
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6 posted 2000-10-26 07:24 AM


Wonderful writing...eloquent, gentle...

And I agree - the ending is great.

K

"He looked across the
silky surface of the Severn...
it was a famously difficult
river with fierce tides..."


From Jack Maggs


Victoria
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7 posted 2000-10-26 11:10 AM


Thank you Tara and Severn..nice of you to peek in ..and thank you for reading..

                 ~Victoria~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)


JamesMichael
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8 posted 2000-11-01 04:15 AM


I would like too....yes...James
Victoria
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9 posted 2000-11-01 10:49 AM


Hi James...nice to hear from you stranger ha..thanks for peeking in..

                ~Victoria~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)


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