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Jeremiah Johnson
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S

0 posted 2000-10-24 10:07 PM


   Forgive me father
For i killed a man we'll
  Looking in his eye's
       I guess
          I
       Was just
      Releaseing
   Some of the demon
        Inside
  It's sad though the
     Guy that died
         Was
          I.


I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


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since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764
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1 posted 2000-10-25 12:52 PM


I love the way you use your words. I kinda guess the ending, but it was cool.  

Ronil (The sweet sound of summer sends serenity through my soul searching for that evermore solitude.)



Lil OnE
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since 1999-12-14
Posts 234
Pasco County. Fl.
2 posted 2000-10-25 02:43 PM


Jeremiah,
Hey... I thought this was really interesting. I like the ending, and the part about releasing the demons inside. Very true... good work  


"No man is EVER worth my tears, and the only one who is will never make me cry"
~Lil OnE!~


DJLI
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since 2000-06-21
Posts 237
TN, USA
3 posted 2000-10-25 09:02 PM


Wonderful

P.L.U.R.

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