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Danielle
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since 1999-12-01
Posts 80
Providence, RI, USA

0 posted 2000-10-21 08:32 PM


The kiss of death has touched my soul
He kissed me and I fell in live
Everything changed that day, we were no longer "just friends"
The relationship had so much potential
Yet he through it all away
He kissed me with a burning passion and I kissed back with love
Love was not what he wanted, he only longed for fun
The love I had in me for him slowly started to fade and die
Soon I despised him, I could hardly even bare to look at him
And that is when he turned to me and said, " I love you"

© Copyright 2000 Danielle Lefebvre - All Rights Reserved
darkstar
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since 2000-08-09
Posts 230
Port Richey, Fl, USA
1 posted 2000-10-21 09:00 PM


Hmmm...so he did love you and it just didn't seem like it? did you take him seriously when he said he loved you? I'm confused...it was a good poem though..

Dark Star

DJLI
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since 2000-06-21
Posts 237
TN, USA
2 posted 2000-10-22 03:23 PM


I know just how you feel.  guys are too confusing some times.  Great writing

"The Sun is gone, but I have a Light" K.C.

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
3 posted 2000-10-22 06:15 PM


Too bad you didn't both fall in Love at the same time...looks like the timing was off a little bit...so now do you fall back in Love or is this the end...or is that another poem...James
Jannel
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 492
Muncie, IN, USA
4 posted 2000-10-22 11:50 PM


love is strange like that... this is a great idea to work with. nice job.

jann elizabeth

If you can feel that staying human is worthwhile, even when it can't have any result whetever, you've beaten them.

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