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JOY 14
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since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA

0 posted 2000-10-18 05:48 PM


A fire breathing monster
Creeps in little Sammy Kurchip's bedroom for the night
Hides in the closet
Snorts out rings of smoke
Covering the boy's head
As he sleeps,
His eyes are scrunched up tight
The monster makes his way
Towards the bed
And growls in the poor boy's ears
"Wake up Sammy, Let's play"
"Wake up Sam, lets play a game"
The boy whimpers
Cries
Covers his pillow over his ears
But the monster just removes it
Scratches the boy's face, and collects his tears
Footsteps outside the door
Stop and someone taps the door
"Sam, are you alright?"
His mother whispers
She quietly steps in
And
The monster creeps into the shadows
She kisses her son's head
Looks around the room
And shudders
Decides to go put a sweater on
And leaves her child to die



© Copyright 2000 Kristen Joy Jacobus - All Rights Reserved
catalinamoon
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
1 posted 2000-10-20 09:24 PM


Joy, I did not quite understand this poem, which is why I didn't reply before. But I am not letting any such heartfelt words as this go by with a "0" next to them.
Anyway, it sounds like there was some terrible trauma here, and I send my hugs.
catalinamoon

JOY 14
Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA
2 posted 2000-10-21 09:57 AM


No trauma. I was just bitter and my words took the shape of this poem. This doesn't stem off from personal experience. Maybe I watched a TV movie? Thanks for replying though. After I wrote it, I figured I might scare some people or confuse them. Sorry.

Joy

Kethry
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
3 posted 2000-10-22 03:50 AM


Joy 14,
This had a frightening reality to it, and I'm not sure I understood it either. BUT it was well written and I wanted to let you that.
Be well
Kethry


Growth demands a temporary surrender of security.
Gail Sheehy

Hardrock
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
4 posted 2000-10-22 11:03 AM


Joy...I'm a little weird, but it made sense to me.  The allegory of the little boy, fearing the "monsters" that lurk within the shadows...I think many children have those fears.  Some even carry over into adulthood.  I know many adults who are afraid of the dark.  Not because of what their common sense tells them is NOT so, but because of the possiblity that there just might be some thing really there.  And then there are some who fear the darkness because of the "demons" that come to haunt their sleep each night....old experiences that resurface with the night, "scratching our faces and collecting our tears" as we cry alone in the darkness of our despair.  Well done.  Hardrock  
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