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Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23
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of Depression

0 posted 2000-10-16 06:16 AM


Death colors,
Trees turning yellow with fear,
Coming death,
Icy breath,
The darkness now holds the year,
Summer grieves,
In red leaves,
That fills the sky in falling,
Cold night wind,
Will then send,
Orange, yellow and red rolling,
Trees shudder.

Gloom 2000



[This message has been edited by Professor Gloom (edited 10-16-2000).]

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inot2B
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since 2000-09-18
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Arkansas
1 posted 2000-10-16 03:18 PM


You have a unique way of
saying winter is coming.
I do like winter but always
ready for summer to return.

Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration
2 posted 2000-10-16 07:39 PM


I have found it most ironic that such a vibrant change of colors is brought about at the time when all things begin to die. Interesting that... Well emitted here - definitely... colorful.

Christopher

fractal007
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since 2000-06-01
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3 posted 2000-10-17 12:58 PM


I like this one.  Sounds almost like a comparison between the coming of fall, and something else - problems in one's life?  One's death?  A collapsing society?
Professor Gloom
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4 posted 2000-10-17 05:18 AM


Thank you,inot2B
I also prefer the winter,
The lessening of light and the greater shadows,
But I am not looking forward to it’s return,
Barely looking toward tomorrow.

Thank you, Christopher,
Glad you enjoyed my Autumnal rhyme.

Thank you, fractal007,
I didn’t intend to place extra meanings,
But the wonder of poetry is interpretation.

Gloom

Severn
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5 posted 2000-10-17 06:16 AM


I definitely agree that poetry is open to interpretation. I can understand how it could be interpretated on a deeper level - mainly because death is considered a strong word to use when describing autumn...and that I think is due to the strains of pastoralism still dominating poems of nature that are written today.

I like this...I like the deviation away from the common trend..

good job!

K

"He looked across the
silky surface of the Severn...
it was a famously difficult
river with fierce tides..."


From Jack Maggs


ill_tactics
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since 2000-02-11
Posts 149

6 posted 2000-10-17 01:09 PM


I like that, this was actually a beautiful picture you just painted.  Thanks for the words, hope to see more of your work soon, much love, One love PEACE
Jannel
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 492
Muncie, IN, USA
7 posted 2000-10-18 01:14 PM


i love autumn.even in creepy scenes such as this. there's a certain chill in the air that gets to me, and i always seem to remember my autumns... this was really nice, sensory.

jann elizabeth

Don't take any wooden nickels
When you sell your soul
-the eels

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