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carolinadreams
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since 2000-07-20
Posts 142


0 posted 2000-10-11 03:00 AM


-Not the Only One-
such insightful daze
such interesting ways
such deliberate malcontent
such life we rent
ok so i've not always made sense
i've not always come close
i've written what i could
i've listened when i should
i've loved all in a sense
ok so i don't always climb a fence
different people have different styles
different people hide the same smiles
different souls show what they need
different shores beckon me
ok so i don't always pass tense
within an angel is love divine
within love yours or mine
within she cries again today
within she's been away
ok so i'm not always here
looking at the stars above
looking into a forgotten love
looking just to be
looking for sanity
ok so i'm not always pure
chancing a life together
chancing a wonderous endeavour
chancing a jump through the trees
chancing just you and me
ok so i'm not quite a poet
but life and dreams combine
but life can always seem to rhyme
but life can smile upon your soul
but life can't just let you know
ok so i'm not the only one

J.L. Koehler
-Peace, Love, and Happiness Forever-


© Copyright 2000 J.L. Koehler - All Rights Reserved
Severn
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

1 posted 2000-10-11 03:25 AM


I read this twice and found myself just loving the rhythm, and the concepts in here. The why you have used 'ok' at the start of some of the lines creates natural verses within a verseless framework - and it comes together so well...

ok so i'm not always here
looking at the stars above
looking into a forgotten love
looking just to be
looking for sanity

oh, and how I can relate...

K

"He looked across the
silky surface of the Severn...
it was a famously difficult
river with fierce tides..."


From Jack Maggs


carolinadreams
Member
since 2000-07-20
Posts 142

2 posted 2000-10-11 03:46 AM


Thank you, it really pulled me to write it. Damn, I feel backwards again. I love you all for being analytical, and spiritual with me as i've written. Poets are definately a gift to people. With permission, I'd like to submit a very long poem. It is for and about poets.

Severn
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

3 posted 2000-10-11 07:30 AM


Of course you can submit a long poem! You don't need to ask hon...there is no 'set' length for a poem in here, or any of the forums for that matter.  

And I totally agree - poets are definitely a gift to people...their hearts and words hey? They often just have a way about them...

hugs
K

Dark Angel
Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095

4 posted 2000-10-11 05:49 PM


Hey, carolinadreams, wow, this is very good, it was like we were sitting down having a chat. You spoke to me  

Excellent!

Maree


"If my words could blanket the skies
and fill every corner and crevice of
this earth, still this won't be enough"
"Maree Russo"

Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
5 posted 2000-10-11 08:50 PM


Loved the words, thought, content, style and basically just everything about this!!!  Sent you an email did you get it?????
Please keep in touch my friend, I'd like to get to know you better...
*Namaste*
Isis

*Good will towards all beings is the highest religion*
~Isis~Goddess~~Sovereign of the Spirit~


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