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Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song


0 posted 10-10-2000 06:58 AM       View Profile for Mark Bohannan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Mark Bohannan

Giving In


What once was my desire
my deep burn of passion fire
rests now in winds of wake
ashes of memories all will forsake

Tides of purity in moonlit care
swept away for all the world to share
innocense lost in this lonesome night
one more time will not make it right

Tempos with angels given to chance
looking for that lover's dance
that so eluded me in chambered walls
lost forever in yesterdays halls

One more ride to set me free
one last kiss and then let it be
upon this midnight's birth to come
lifetime's lonliness I now succcumb

No passage to paths of gold
No more tickets to love to be sold
Melting against the heat within
Rest now for I am giving in

Mark Bohannan

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LM
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1 posted 10-10-2000 08:41 AM       View Profile for LM   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LM

It's so beautiful, I'm totally speachless...
Wonderful work, I enjoyed it a lot.
Take Care!


"Most girls want a man with the mean green
Don't wanna dance if he can't be
Everything that I dream up
A man that understands real love"

Butterflies_dont_cry
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2 posted 10-10-2000 09:40 AM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

Mark*
The heaviness of this piece is felt deeply...each line added a tear ending with a tidal wave.  I'm so sorry to see this kind of pain in your heart...excellent expression from your pen and soul.
Martie
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3 posted 10-10-2000 11:57 AM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Mark--you have expressed so much anguish in this excellent poem...very well written, my friend...Hearts that give so much to love feel pain deeply as well as joy...hugs!
Janet Marie
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4 posted 10-10-2000 02:56 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

no more talk of giving up ... or giving in
all things meant to be ... will allow you to love again
somtimes we have to let go to ... to truly hold on
sometimes we must walk in the darkness ... before we dance in the dawn
as long as I am on this earth ... you'll not be lost in loneliness ...
on our friendship you can depend ... always believe in you and this

******
Mark,
you need only to see your self thru our eyes... and then simply believe ...
fate destiny and the powers that be ...will make all our paths be known in time ...
you express your pain with the same eloquence
and depth of emotion and beauty that you express your love..
and you touch deep with this one,


Sunshine
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Listening to every heart


5 posted 10-10-2000 05:27 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Forsake not thy lonely heart
passionate fires shall impart
and succumb naught to lonely nights
but wry smile under starshine bright
and look yet upon ‘morrow’s day
‘twill come to thee, that which may…

Ah Mark, I'd rather see you chasing butterflies...'tis heaviness in your heart, indeed, that is seen here...
Marsha
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6 posted 10-11-2000 02:35 AM       View Profile for Marsha   Email Marsha   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marsha's Home Page   View IP for Marsha

Mark my friend this is utterly awesome, such a beautiful poem. You know I love this of course, because all your poems I adore. This one has something a bit extra, it is utterly perfect, I'm speachless truly.
                 Marsha
                    
carolinadreams
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7 posted 10-11-2000 03:06 AM       View Profile for carolinadreams   Email carolinadreams   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for carolinadreams

Love your work here, I felt!! Have you ever heard enya ? "On Your Shore"

You've got a blossom, and roses can bloom year-round.
Severn
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8 posted 10-11-2000 03:21 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Mark, this absolutely aches...and it's written so well.

Hugs

K
kitkat
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9 posted 10-12-2000 12:39 AM       View Profile for kitkat   Email kitkat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kitkat

I can hear the sadness in this poem. Yes you may feel like you need to "rest now"...but it is only so you can regain your strength to Love again.{{hugs}}
Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song


10 posted 10-12-2000 02:24 AM       View Profile for Mark Bohannan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mark Bohannan

Thank you all very much and I WILL get back to replying and writing as normal so please do forgive my lack of response during this brief transition in my life.  I hope you all know that I appreciate you.
EagleOne
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Between a laugh and a tear...


11 posted 10-12-2000 09:45 AM       View Profile for EagleOne   Email EagleOne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for EagleOne

I'm sad that you feel this pain Mark.

"The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest"
~ My Angel.
Victoria
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12 posted 10-12-2000 12:18 PM       View Profile for Victoria   Email Victoria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Victoria

Heartfelt Mark..nicely written..

A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)
Irish Rose
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13 posted 10-12-2000 08:21 PM       View Profile for Irish Rose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Irish Rose

This is lovely, Mark, very nice one here.

Kathleen

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on the roof again


14 posted 10-13-2000 11:49 PM       View Profile for Ethan Halo   Email Ethan Halo   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Ethan Halo's Home Page   View IP for Ethan Halo

mark,
you use words like a paintbrush. this is wonderful poetry here. i liked these lines:
"Tides of purity in moonlit care
swept away for all the world to share
innocense lost in this lonesome night
one more time will not make it right"

the whole thing reminded me of a Hootie song...
"let her cry, if the tears fall down like rain.
let her sing, if it eases all her pain.
let her go, let her walk right out on me.
and if the sun comes up tomorrow, let her be."

good stuff here. i'm glad i popped in here.



I am reminded of the immortal words of Socrates, who said, "I drank what?"
Marina
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15 posted 10-14-2000 12:11 AM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marina

I have not been in Dark in awhile, and I come here to find this sad poem from my favourite Cowboy.

What can I say here Mark???  So many words come to mind, but I think I might just be best to say.........

HUGS!!!!!!!!!!!   My arms are always open, my friend.

Marina


It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen
Marina Crossley


Irish Rose
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16 posted 10-14-2000 07:14 PM       View Profile for Irish Rose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Irish Rose

Mark, I had to read this again, I just adore it.

Kathleen

catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone


17 posted 10-15-2000 02:10 PM       View Profile for catalinamoon   Email catalinamoon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit catalinamoon's Home Page   View IP for catalinamoon

Oh Mark, don't tell me, you too? What is it that makes real love so impossible for us? This is a perfect poem, expresses my feelings in every way. Please read mine, I could use some support.
from the heartbroken...
Sunnyone
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18 posted 10-15-2000 11:14 PM       View Profile for Sunnyone   Email Sunnyone   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunnyone's Home Page   View IP for Sunnyone

~~~ Mark ~~~
I can only echo what those above me have said, and add that I truly hope that you don't ever give in..........


Follow your dream!



[This message has been edited by Sunny1 (edited 10-15-2000).]
CocoBaci
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19 posted 10-11-2004 02:24 AM       View Profile for CocoBaci   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CocoBaci

Tempos with angels given to chance
looking for that lover's dance
that so eluded me in chambered walls
lost forever in yesterdays halls


I found this one and have dug it up as it's one treasure of a read I've touched upon...

Exquisite!
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20 posted 07-15-2005 09:42 PM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

I am of the mind that sometimes we have to feel this pain in order to absolutely wallow in the joy when it does come   Nicely done Mark, dusting of shelves in here as I was sort of missing your work.  Happy Summer to you.
 
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