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Allysa
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In an upside-down garden


0 posted 10-09-2000 03:46 PM       View Profile for Allysa   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Allysa

The package said to just take one,
but instead I just took three.
I didn't care much for the ride,
I just wanted to escape me.
Escape the problems that I faced,
oh the joy of life.
I couldn't deal with the pain,
all the turmoil and strife.
Oh so sad, they all say,
for someone so young to die.
And I guess the only known reason,
will remain between you and I.

© Copyright 2000 Allysa - All Rights Reserved
kari
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1 posted 10-09-2000 04:53 PM       View Profile for kari   Email kari   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kari

All I can say is... I know what you mean.  Good job.
Lady Lost
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2 posted 10-09-2000 07:54 PM       View Profile for Lady Lost   Email Lady Lost   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lady Lost

I know those pills all too well.  ...beth

"And I still believe you can never have too much fiction because reality is such a bore..."
- REA
Butterflies_dont_cry
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3 posted 10-09-2000 07:57 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

Understood and felt...your piece will speak to many I'm sure~
Severn
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4 posted 10-09-2000 11:23 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Hey Allysa...

you've written a lot of pain into this one. Very sad indeed.

It seems to infer suicidal tendencies - if not, then I apologize. Just to let you know though, we have to monitor the poems here to make sure they follow our guidelines, which state that posting poems on suicide isn't allowed.

If you want to talk at all about this, feel free to email me.

K



"He looked across the
silky surface of the Severn...
it was a famously difficult
river with fierce tides..."


From Jack Maggs

Allysa
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5 posted 10-10-2000 08:26 AM       View Profile for Allysa   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allysa

I really don't know what this is about. Basically just wanting to escape life for a while but it going to far. I guess, I dunno. Maybe about Oding, I duno.
CitiZen-One
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6 posted 10-10-2000 04:49 PM       View Profile for CitiZen-One   Email CitiZen-One   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit CitiZen-One's Home Page   View IP for CitiZen-One

Yes indeed, I know of those little tabs of heaven that fall a man down to hell.
Erin
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7 posted 10-11-2000 12:20 AM       View Profile for Erin   Email Erin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Erin

Allysa~
Escaping this dream isnt reality. I really with it was cause I would like to escape it myself. But not on these terms. I want to die happy and try to at least make the best of what I have left on this planet. Cause for we know we can die any day. If you want to talk to me email me. Ok???


~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~
carolinadreams
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8 posted 10-11-2000 02:18 AM       View Profile for carolinadreams   Email carolinadreams   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for carolinadreams

a look in the mirror shows just one
but it sure as hel* don't look like me
been through things most don't know exist
just wanted to forget this [profanity edited]
burning within can get out of hand
to the point of dining spam
cryptic comes most feelings
descriptive helps the healing

I don't know you, but you have a way with words that shouldn't be missed. Thank you for your poem, and smile if you can, you are loved.
J.L. Koehler


[This message has been edited by Severn (edited 10-11-2000).]
Allysa
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9 posted 10-11-2000 08:31 AM       View Profile for Allysa   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allysa

Okay, for future referances, in case anyone gets worried, not all of my poems are about me. Some of them are about me, but mostly the broken hearted ones. This one is about a part of me, and a part of my friends.

Citzen1: thanks much for replying.

Erin: I want to die happy to, but it's being alone that kills me.

Carolinadreams: it's nice to know im loved.
Erin
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10 posted 10-12-2000 01:55 AM       View Profile for Erin   Email Erin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Erin

Allysa~
I was gonna email you because I was gonna share something with you but I couldnt so maybe next time I will tell you.


~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~
firejerm
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11 posted 10-12-2000 06:06 PM       View Profile for firejerm   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for firejerm

Allysa,

     Being a paramedic, I'm the one usually trying to prevent these pills from absorbing into your system    However, I wonder just how many of "these bottles" I might have laying around for this very same use.  Great work...MORE!

Jeremy

"Those little slices of death, how I loathe them."
-Edgar Allen Poe
fractal007
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12 posted 10-13-2000 04:31 AM       View Profile for fractal007   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for fractal007

This is a great poem!  It really hits home with the way people often feel in problems.  It's often quite a bit different when you experience the problem yourself!  But I just hope that you one day see yourself find a better way...
Ethan Halo
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13 posted 10-14-2000 12:03 AM       View Profile for Ethan Halo   Email Ethan Halo   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Ethan Halo's Home Page   View IP for Ethan Halo

"that's the sound of a bottle when it's hollow
swallow 'em all, wallow and drown in your sorrow.
and tomorrow, you're probably gonna wanna do it again."

this reminds me of a few i've written. well expressed thoughts, well penned. i live this.

I am reminded of the immortal words of Socrates, who said, "I drank what?"
Jose Marti
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14 posted 10-15-2000 07:52 PM       View Profile for Jose Marti   Email Jose Marti   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jose Marti

this was a grat poem. I feel that way a lot. sometimes I want to grt in my car, get in 5th gear and send it flying strait off of a cliff.
Allysa
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15 posted 10-16-2000 08:05 AM       View Profile for Allysa   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allysa

thanks all for replying!!

Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see.
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16 posted 10-17-2000 12:44 PM       View Profile for ill_tactics   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ill_tactics

Very good poem, I understand what youre goin through, but I cant say i've walked in your shoes.  Much love, One love peace...
Allysa
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17 posted 10-18-2000 03:22 PM       View Profile for Allysa   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allysa

i cant say ive walked those shoes either.............

Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see.
jlocke
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18 posted 10-19-2000 03:00 PM       View Profile for jlocke   Email jlocke   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jlocke

Beautiful poem...I wore those shoes...I go barefoot now.

Love is the law, love under will.
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19 posted 10-19-2000 06:07 PM       View Profile for Acies   Email Acies   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Acies

Allysa -- is this about nitsuj?  Keep your head up girl...i fell your pain

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

Allysa
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20 posted 10-23-2000 08:13 AM       View Profile for Allysa   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allysa

This pretty much has absolutely nothing to do with me, or nitusj, for that matter, except that he called me three times this weekend, and I really needed that. Well, kinda bumping this up for more ppl to read!!! C ya!!


Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see.
Hardrock
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21 posted 10-23-2000 09:42 AM       View Profile for Hardrock   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Hardrock

Allysa...I understand perfectly what you are writing about here.  As for having suicidal ideation or tendencies...I too write about things from which I am actually removed.  The poem itself is well written, touches on a common theme and has, obviously, reached many people.  Well done.  Hardrock
Allysa
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22 posted 10-24-2000 08:12 AM       View Profile for Allysa   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allysa

Geez you guys make me feel special. Thanks to everyone who replied, I feel loved. I've never goten so many replies b4.
Allysa

Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see.
Allysa
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23 posted 02-16-2001 04:18 PM       View Profile for Allysa   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allysa

bump


I wish people would stop telling me that I can do anything I want to. I never thought that I couldn't.

 
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