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since 2000-08-12
Posts 137
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0 posted 2000-10-06 12:49 PM



I think to a place forgotten by time
Insanity, with no reason, or rhyme.
It's presence looms, like a dark deity
A scar on the face of humanity.
Those who lived different lives, or different race,
Sent to die in this horrible place.
I picture them, on their knees, in the mud
As Mother Earth drinks of their fear, and blood.
Those who did not die, lived their lives in fear
Of the atrocities that went on here.
Though time has served to somewhat close the wound,
It wont conceal the evils of this tomb.
It stands, a shell of what it used to be
Cold, and distant...like a memory.


-"..."


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Songbird
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since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184
Missouri
1 posted 2000-10-06 09:01 PM


How about? Haunting Memories or Why Mother Earth Cries
Severn
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

2 posted 2000-10-09 05:28 AM


No clue on a title...

I actually like Untitled - adds to the mystery.

Love that last line btw.

good poem!

K

AVANTI
Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664
INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE
3 posted 2000-10-10 02:26 PM


well written...
how about...
"lost times"

If I should fall again, then they will laugh but what if just this one I rise?
Avanti Rao



JamesMichael
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
4 posted 2000-10-10 03:33 PM


Sounds outrageous but how about "Muckworm".
boardman
Junior Member
since 2000-05-09
Posts 44

5 posted 2000-10-11 12:13 PM


Hi,

I like it!

How about Hell on Earth?

Keep up the good work.

Vince


"Explosions, are just the thoughts of a creative person." - Boardman

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