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Dark_kisses_Within
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since 2000-03-21
Posts 680
Kansas

0 posted 2000-10-02 02:28 PM


Touch my hand...
Can you feel it?
Look at my smile...
Can you see it?
Listen to my voice...
Can you hear it?
I think I'm in love...
Could you tell it?


No person is worth your tears, and the only one that is ...... will never make you cry



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The Lonely Stranger
Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 361
Upstate, NY, USA
1 posted 2000-10-02 02:35 PM


I love a poem that hits fast & leaves the reader alone to think....... this poem does that.


Thanks for the read.
TLS

Erin
Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
2 posted 2000-10-02 09:33 PM


I like this one. Short but yet to a point. I like the way you asked the questions in it. Thanks for sharing it!!

It TaKeS a MiNuTe To LiKe SoMeOnE, aN hOuR tO hAvE a CrUsH oN sOmEoNe & A dAy To FaLl In LoVe, BuT iT tAkEs A lIfEtImE tO fOrGeT sOmEoNe.

EagleOne
Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...
3 posted 2000-10-03 07:21 AM


It's the little things that count the most. I love the way you write!

"The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest"
~ My Angel.

Lady Lost
Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 470

4 posted 2000-10-04 07:15 PM


This is awesome!!! I really enjoyed how in so few words you can describe your happiness.....beth

"And I still believe you can never have too much fiction because reality is such a bore..."
- REA

firejerm
Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 217
Springfield, OH, good ol USA
5 posted 2000-10-04 10:57 PM


Wish I felt it    Sometime I'm sure! lol...Great work.  I need to come in here more often I think, except just to post one of my own  

Yours,
Jeremy

"Those little slices of death, how I loathe them."
-Edgar Allen Poe

Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
6 posted 2000-10-04 11:26 PM


Hope he does.. good feelings and good vibes  

*Friendship is a horizon - which expands whenever we approach it...*
~Isis~Goddess~~Sovereign of the Spirit~



gjam
Member
since 2000-08-23
Posts 85
Arkansas
7 posted 2000-10-04 11:41 PM


the little things are what makes the difference.......good poem   Greg
Jon Mewett
Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304

8 posted 2000-10-05 04:30 AM


I think I'm in love...
Could you tell it?

Yep  

Jon

boardman
Junior Member
since 2000-05-09
Posts 44

9 posted 2000-10-06 12:02 PM


Hi,

Your poem is filled with perfect, simple points.
Can you taste it?

I like it a lot!

Vince

"Explosions, are just the thoughts of a creative person." - Boardman

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